In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Nowadays, by increasing the human-being's challenges, it is inevitable matter to work more and more. Many people work harder and faster to make more money. Also, some others work much more hours to achieve in higher job positions sooner. However, this kind of working causes many workers to have less efficiency in their job environment and usually make mistakes which most of them cannot be compensated. Some other people and employments state that do the right job by spending even more time is better than do works quickly and usually mistakefull. So, I definitely agree with the second opinion and believe that do the right job with slower pace is better than do the wrong job in faster way. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that today's working environment is a place of severe competition. There are few job positions for many job seekers. Most of seekers are very expert in their job and some of them are working for less money than the employments pay to their employees due to their demand for money. This matter causes a severe competition and forces workers to do their right job because if their made only one mistake the employments will substitute them with another one. For example, I worked as a secretary in a big company and i had a lot of stress for doing my best because the manager usually threatened all workers to recruit a new worker with less money. So, sometimes he implemented his threaten by announcing that he want to recruit new employees. Although he never did this action, this threatens always made me and my colleagues stressful and we always were on a severe pressure to do our responsibility without making a mistake.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that I think the commitment for doing the right job is good for our personality. If we usually make mistakes and do the jobs imprecisely, then this issue put on our mind and make a hobby for us to do the wrong job and after that try to revise it. If we have the commitment to do the right job, this matter settle in our mind and we always try to do our best in other challenges. For instance, Farhad is one of my friends who usually had the commitment to do the best of him in doing the university homework. Therefore, he works as a manager in big factory due to this hobby and he always enhance to higher positions very soon.
In conclusion, although making mistake is an inevitable issue in our life, it is better to try for reducing the mistakes by increasing our care in doing jobs. This matter might be take more time, but it is better than to do wrong job even by spending less time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the seekers') or simply say ''Most seekers''.
Suggestion: Most of the seekers; Most seekers
...few job positions for many job seekers. Most of seekers are very expert in their job and some o...
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Line 2, column 558, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ked as a secretary in a big company and i had a lot of stress for doing my best b...
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Line 2, column 885, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
...e me and my colleagues stressful and we always were on a severe pressure to do our responsi...
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Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'enhances'.
Suggestion: enhances
...factory due to this hobby and he always enhance to higher positions very soon. In conc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58212058212 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5945396204 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430353430353 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2605460051 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.952380952 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9047619048 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173346802151 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690745662661 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666733996354 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128072922024 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672255586461 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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