Nowadays in some countries the proportion of young adults is bigger than the proportion of older people. I don't believe that the benefits of this situation outweigh the drawbacks because of several reasons.
On the one side, young adults are fresh generations who are currently living on their best conditions. This is because all of their body organs and brains can perform maximally on their ages (20s). No wonder that they can learn new knowledge and technology faster than the older generation. Moreover, people on this age are usually have high working spirit because most of them are just starting their careers. For a country, this situation is beneficial because having more young adults mean having more productive citizens. The more productive citizens that a country have, the better the economy condition will be.
On the other side, young adults have different characteristics and personality traits from older generations. Most of them are usually open-minded and value freedom, where they hate to obey rules and regulations. This then lead to the emergence of a rebel generation which is not advantageous for a country. Whereas, most of them are usually just started their careers and still become the subordinates which are required to obey to their older supervisors. Thus, even though they have big potential in working, they can not become productive generations because of their lack of obedience. As a result, having more young adults than older generations are just harmful for the country.
In conclusion, I do not believe that the advantages of this situation outweigh the drawbacks because even though young adults have high potential in learning new knowledge and have high working spirits, most of them are rebellious which make their potentials to be a productive generation become useless. Thus, instead of beneficial, this situation is harmful for a country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, still, then, thus, whereas, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25742574257 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76447511259 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471947194719 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5127411424 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5625 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145547240562 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576384871334 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407246517117 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113872886486 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326263879414 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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