Nowadays, some celebrities such as film stars, sportsmen and pop musicians are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which jobs should be highly paid?
There has been several debates over the topic whether film stars, sportsmen and musicians should have high remunerations. I agree that celebrities receive high salaries, and it is justifiable for several reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will state the arguments and also mention a few professions that should equally be highly paid.
Before all else, these celebrities represent the entire country to the world. These celebrities work hard to entertain us by undergoing hours of practice sessions as well as uphold our countries culture and values in front of the whole world through their performance. These celebrities have a short career span, entering the industry at the age of 19-20 and retiring by 33-35 years. Their remaining years end up in struggles.
Second, their privacy is hampered due to the paparazzi following them everywhere. Furthermore, even their spouse and children do not have privacy and needs security. They do not enjoy the luxuries of the ordinary people.
However, there are other occupations that should also receive higher salaries. For example, the doctors and nurses invest years studying, and they undergo many tribulations to be able to serve a patient better. Subsequently, there are people who protect our country, such as the army, navy and marines. who sacrifice their family lives and their safety to give us a peaceful and secure lives. We should also not forget the police officers and the firefighters who risk their lives to keep us safe and maintain order.
To conclude, I would like to reiterate that celebrities like the film stars, sportsmen and musicians bring glory to our country through their performances and by sacrificing their privacy. On the other hand, a number of other jobs also requires a lot of efforts and deserve a lucrative salary.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 303, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Who
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, second, so, well, for example, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17406143345 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74717527817 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600682593857 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8908507222 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1764705882 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2352941176 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168399821999 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487366392666 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048596989776 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918610848458 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800422277846 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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