Without a doubt, in order to succeed in any aspects, it needs the contributions of many different elements, including hard work and aptitude. While I am of the idea about the significant role of natural abilities, I argue that industriousness also indispensable in terms of being successful.
On the one hand, talented people more easily gain success than others. The first reason is that they often have abilities to tackle their working or studying problems. In other words, when confronting troubles, some individuals with aptitude will find effective measures to solve. The second reason is that they have a sense of creation and imagination. For example, if they have to complete a new and complicated task, they will be rapidly used to it and even create new methods to get high performance. Therefore, these things lead to success.
On the other hand, without practising regularly, it is challenging to succeed. Obviously, the more efforts people put into their works, the more achievements they can get. Those who spend time on a careful rehearsal for their jobs or who try their best to pursue dreams will obtain more real experiences and sophisticated skills to make their own progress. For instance, not only do medical specialists require years training in Universities, but they also continue to self-study and participate in some specific post-graduate courses to be professional and well-known in their fields. Moreover, hard-working people are also able to make good relationships with their surroundings. The fact has shown that people have a tendency to be willing to sympathize with those who are industrious. Individuals are inseparable parts of communities, without others' supports they will find it difficult to get success.
In conclusion, although both of natural abilities and hard work exert specifically significant effects on individual success, I believe that people with hard-working characteristic will be more successful than those who have God-given gifts but with no efforts.
- As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways.What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. To what extend are the changes that took place good? 79
- The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009. 89
- The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries 78
- Some people think that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree? 73
- In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people skin outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society. 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... aspects, it needs the contributions of many different elements, including hard work and aptit...
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Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'succeeding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: succeeding
...practising regularly, it is challenging to succeed. Obviously, the more efforts people put...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35015772871 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12526128633 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593059936909 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4075003266 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8125 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1824551734 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604381771972 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706578581176 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128335611863 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538520208644 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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