Ielts writing task 1 The two maps below show an island before and after construction of tourist facilities

Submitted by tashina on Sat, 12/19/2020 - 16:14

These two maps that are given illustrates the diagrammatical structure of an island and the comparison is made based on the modifications done to it. Overall, when looking at these two pictures , its clearly distinct that there has been major changes made to the island after the construction which looks more occupied and less spacious compare to what it was looking previously.

The island is 100 meters wide and is surrounded by sea on all sides and with a beach which is towards its left side . The only difference that we can see after reconstruction is that there is now swimming area available in front of the beach which was not there earlier. However, not a lot has changed in terms of plantation as it remained the same. The major difference that can be noticed is in the accommodation sector as there were no houses seen on the island. In addition to the houses , there is a big restaurant seen in the centre of the island with a reception just located in front of it .

Moreover, there were no footpath available , which has made it comfortable for the visitors to move around and enjoy the scenic view. Furthermore , there is a pier attached to the island and a vehicle track which takes you directly towards reception and to the restaurant as well.

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Average: 5.6 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
These two maps that are given illustrates the diagramma...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rall, when looking at these two pictures , its clearly distinct that there has bee...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h a beach which is towards its left side . The only difference that we can see aft...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...difference that can be noticed is in the accommodation sector as there were no ho...
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Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...on the island. In addition to the houses , there is a big restaurant seen in the c...
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Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... a reception just located in front of it . Moreover, there were no footpath ava...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reover, there were no footpath available , which has made it comfortable for the v...
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Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fortable for the visitors to move around and enjoy the scenic view. Furthermore ,...
^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and enjoy the scenic view. Furthermore , there is a pier attached to the island ...
^^
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e is a pier attached to the island and a vehicle track which takes you directly t...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1041.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68918918919 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73603719045 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54954954955 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3640778481 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133921835936 0.215688989381 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502867553945 0.103423049105 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484723518008 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848726251375 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602722353993 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
These two maps that are given illustrates the diagramma...
^^
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rall, when looking at these two pictures , its clearly distinct that there has bee...
^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h a beach which is towards its left side . The only difference that we can see aft...
^^
Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...difference that can be noticed is in the accommodation sector as there were no ho...
^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...on the island. In addition to the houses , there is a big restaurant seen in the c...
^^
Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... a reception just located in front of it . Moreover, there were no footpath ava...
^^
Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reover, there were no footpath available , which has made it comfortable for the v...
^^
Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fortable for the visitors to move around and enjoy the scenic view. Furthermore ,...
^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and enjoy the scenic view. Furthermore , there is a pier attached to the island ...
^^
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e is a pier attached to the island and a vehicle track which takes you directly t...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1041.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68918918919 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73603719045 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54954954955 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3640778481 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133921835936 0.215688989381 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502867553945 0.103423049105 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484723518008 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848726251375 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602722353993 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.