Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People try to do different things in life to achieve their goals. Some people believe that trying new things and taking risks can lead them to reach their aim and help them to be successful in life. On the other hand, others believe that doing things people already know is the key to success. I, personally, of the opinion that doing what people know is a better way to get success in life. I will elaborate on my view in the following paragraphs.
First, doing repetitive tasks creates people a master in a job. People try to do new things during their life. Most of the time They must do something new in their jobs which they do not know anything about them at all. After some time, they can learn how to do their tasks and can be an expert in their job. An example can convey this matter better. One of my friends works in a computer shopping center. He must have to sell and assemble computers there. He did not know anything about these matters but after 3 years of doing the same thing every day; he got excellent skills in his job. Now, he starts his own business in computer marketing and does the same thing in his shopping center. If he does different tasks every day, He will not learn these skills and cannot establish his own business.
Second, By doing the same task, people can have better concentrate on their job which is a key factor to reach success. Having concentrate is the most important matter in everything. People can reduce errors in their doing by focusing on their jobs and get better results from their jobs. By having better results from their job people can be successful in their life. For instance, one of my friends used to get different projects a the same time to earn more money. Most of the time he could not concentrate well on the projects and he forgot different aspects of those projects. As a result of lacking focus on projects, his job was full of errors. So, he lost his clients after a while. If he had one project a the time, he could have more concentration on the project. The more focus he had, the more projects he could have. By getting more projects he could be a successful person instead of being a loser.
In conclusion, people must do the same thing to be successful in their life. Because they can be an expert in their jobs after a while. Moreover, they can have a better focus on their tasks which they have done many times rather than doing new things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: task
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43400447427 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26515121329 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409395973154 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1241037376 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.3448275862 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4137931034 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.79310344828 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242278628633 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837697288629 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08613420469 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196249570139 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875554178994 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.29 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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