I agree with the statement that it is sometimes necessary, and even desirable for us to learn through direct experience because if a theory is accepted without experiencing it may be to learn nothing at all. However, in my view, some theories can not be learned by experiment so we have to accept them mentally such as the Big Bang theory. Scientists could propose the Big Bang theory with evidence from cosmology and natural patterns, while without experiencing this proposal, It can be challenging and we can not reach a reliable solution, eventually, we can not trust this proposal and learn something about it.
One reason for my fundamental agreement with the statement is that experience allows people to try new things to understand the theory, so people have an opportunity to learn many things and receive a valuable achievement. For example, NASA scientists almost are developing new theories to make platforms for the industry. In fact, they try new things to receive the best solution for industry requirements, in this way they provide much valuable knowledge about theory to engineering in the industry.
Another reason why I strongly agree with the statement is that experiencing is an opportunity to take risks, taking risks sometimes leads to mistakes or worse, it can lead to disaster but undoubted, most achievements in science were not achieved without learning from mistakes. Our society has witnessed humans such as Wright Brothers who tried to learn flight theories, they risked their lives to uncover the secrets of flight then this valuable experience allowed humans to learn the concept of flight and began to create aerial vehicles.
In sum, almost all theories were accepted by experimentation, and history has shown this to us, from Archimedes 'bath experience to prove fluid theories to the Wright brothers' understanding of how birds fly.
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 60
- It is possible to pass laws that control or place limits on people s behavior but legislation cannot reform human nature Laws cannot change what is in people s hearts and minds 50
- An airship is a type of aircraft that flies using a very large balloon filled with a lighter than air gas Airships were an important means of air transportation before the 1940s but are little used today having been largely replaced by airplanes and helic 80
- Nowadays people are more willing to help the people who they don t know For example giving food and clothes to the people who need them than they were in the past 60
- Wild tuna a species of large ocean fish have decreased in number because of overfishing Recently attempts have been made to farm tuna by feeding the fish in ocean cages until they become large enough for sale However tuna farming has faced several problem 75
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to flight'
Suggestion: to flight
...h as Wright Brothers who tried to learn flight theories, they risked their lives to un...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, in fact, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 304.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17434210526 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87197804264 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6093996591 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.777777778 118.986275619 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7777777778 23.4991977007 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391413340641 0.243740707755 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16210283254 0.0831039109588 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155759267314 0.0758088955206 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211024545789 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153251740633 0.0667264976115 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.1392134831 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to flight'
Suggestion: to flight
...h as Wright Brothers who tried to learn flight theories, they risked their lives to un...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, in fact, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 304.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17434210526 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87197804264 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6093996591 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.777777778 118.986275619 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7777777778 23.4991977007 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391413340641 0.243740707755 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16210283254 0.0831039109588 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155759267314 0.0758088955206 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211024545789 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153251740633 0.0667264976115 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.1392134831 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.