Nowadays, people are busy with many things, if you were given a short period time, what would you choose?
1, Learn to play a new sport you never played;
2, Learn to cook food in a different way;
3, Learn to do some hand-made work like clothes.
People attempt to implement various ways in given a short period of time. While some people learn to play an unfamiliar sport they never played, others cook food in an alternative direction. Moreover, another try to study some hand-made work. It is so controvertible for people to determine a specific idea under the busy circumstance. In my view, I would like to select to play a new sport among these chooses. I would be a successful person in school and a workplace, cultivate profound knowledge about other fields, and escape from my comfort zone.
To begin with, playing a new sport creates an opportunity to increase the possibility of a successful person. In sports teams, most people attain proficient communication skills. The more they try to broaden such places, the more the situations they have to have a conversation with others skyrocket. For example, one man joins a new organization where there are tons of unknown people for him. If he wants to enjoy from full of his feeling, he has to talk with others as much as possible. From this action, his communication skills would be skillful to succeed in society.
Secondly, people swell wisdom by playing a new sport they never played. They would be able to make use of the knowledge in school and a company. For example, someone has not ever played a team sport. They cannot organize a group assignment and a meeting with others in the company properly. On the other hand, once they take their time to play a new team sport, they would exploit the experience by gathering with others to these tasks.
Finally, new sports people never played provides them with an opportunity to avoid getting in their comfort zone. Most people rely on the same circumstances such as playing the same games, talking with same sports, and staying one company for whole life, and so on. The typed of people would limit themselves as the life where they satisfy with a lifestyle. However, once they try to dive into playing new sports, they would not only gain new enjoyments for their life but also escape from their comfort zone.
To sum up, I prefer to play a new sport I have never played. I surely believe that I can escalate the number of organizations they stuck into, change from my confined knowledge to significant wisdom, and diminish the decisions to stay in my com
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...implement various ways in given a short period of time. While some people learn to play an unf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for example, such as, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77722772277 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61856855633 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512376237624 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4660595769 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9130434783 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5652173913 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252145655466 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083858471794 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621101156497 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15171964271 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820708501963 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...implement various ways in given a short period of time. While some people learn to play an unf...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for example, such as, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77722772277 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61856855633 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512376237624 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4660595769 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9130434783 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5652173913 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252145655466 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083858471794 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621101156497 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15171964271 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820708501963 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.