Health is important for living. To maintain health people do different kinds of activities to prevent their health from getting sick. To the following statement that physical exercise is more important to older people than younger people. I agree to the following statement due to my three reasons.
Firstly, regular exercise could prevent many health problems. This is because old people have a higher percentage of suffering health problems. When people exercise their immune system is improved. The exercise regulates the oxygen and blood pressure making the immune system more functional. Old people tend to have weaker immune systems than other people. So physical exercise is required to prevent health problems like diseases.
Secondly, physical exercise for old people could help to have mental health. This is because physical exercise produces endorphins. The endorphins act as stress relievers and provide happiness. This helps to maintain mental health. Also, physical exercise for old people provides them to not become dependent on others. This helps them to reduce pressure from receiving help from others. For example, many old people feel pressured from always receiving helps. However, when they do physical exercise they could have personal power to overcome their problem reducing their stress.
Finally, doing physical exercise helps old people to be engaged in society. Senior aged adults don’t really have the opportunity to be closely engaged with society. However, physical exercise could be done with several other members. This makes physical exercise a social event for senior adults. Maintaining the social relationship could help to bring energy in life. Also, could avoid a sense of depression and loneliness.
In conclusion, I believe that physical exercise is more important for senior adults than young people. This is because physical exercise prevents health problems, provides better mental health, and helps old people to have social activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ercentage of suffering health problems. When people exercise their immune system is ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...old people to have social activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58415841584 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47177754577 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471947194719 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.7766978562 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.0769230769 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.6538461538 20.6045352989 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357484050109 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113716011505 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113975248241 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241030442045 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096825820766 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.85 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.9 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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