Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear Mr Lawson,

I would like to draw your attention to a concern which I have get to grips with recently and it is influencing my work strongly.
Recently my laptop has been replaced with a new one due to the low performance of my previous one. But when I am trying to install software on the new laptop it is not allowing me to do so, as I am not having the administration authorization on that. This is highly affecting my work as I am not able to proceed with the work without installing the required software.
I have mentioned the problem to the IT team several times still I could not get any resolution. I would really appreciate it if you could take the necessary action by escalating the issue to the IT team either by providing me the admin authority on a new laptop or else providing me with the previous laptop.

Your sincerely,
Sumali Nuwanthika.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the; IT
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 702.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 156.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77918439074 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 127.690721649 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 225.0 290.88556701 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5310573321 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.285714286 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121538276263 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629183672073 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452709136379 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0822644480965 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402701578367 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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