The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The prompt urges that the primary goal of technological advancement is ought to augment people's leisure time by increasing their efficiency. For some obvious reasons I would like to be "mostly disagree" with the concept and so hereby I am obliged to provide necessary point of views in defense of my position.
In the very beginning we have to critically analyze what technological advancement actually means. Is it only the sophistication of people's in field of science and engineering or it has to do something with the intelligence and cognizance of mass people. In context of the prompt technological advancement indicates the development in the field of technology and science in order to expediate the mundane works more precipitately. Another prospect of technological advancement is to increase the chances of knowing the unknown, disclosing what was once unprecedented. Aim of technological advancement can be subdivided into two categories. First of all - to help people to reduce their energy in mundane works that sometimes can be extremly dull and second one is to make the way more pervasive for innovation which in return provides more advancement in that respective field. For example - in earlier times people will take hard labor to carry heavy burdens or task by them. However, innovation of wheel really decreased much of their labors and in return people of that times invested more of theri energy into more productive fields, such as - harvesting crops, making houses, hunting and so on. This is one outocme of technological advancement. Another prospect is - aftermath the innovation of wheel, people became more creative in their thinking regarding carriage of heavy burdens and so they push themselves for another innovation and eventually they succeeded in innovating automobiles. Here the second example is the result of the cognitive developement which is precipitated by the innovation of wheel and can be identified as the evidence of the axiom - "advancement begets advancement".
As the prompt suggested that - the fundamental purpose of technological advancement is to augment people's leisure by providing more efficiency - is a oximoron by itself. How can person be more efficient by having more leisure time? It can be. But it surely not the primary purpose of the technological advancement. Initially people inclined to to make their life easier so that they can conduct more productive works rather than being exigent in some heavy or leastly dull works, not so - that they can have sufficient time to chill out or be inactive. For example - the innovation of mobile phone is not to increase the leisure time of people by letting them playing in the phone. Yes, all thesehas come with the innovation but it was not the main idea behind the sophisticated work. The prime focus of the innovation of mobile is to lessen people's time and efforts to have a mutual exchange of information which was once very painstaking as people has to go out by themselves and convey the messages. This caused huge time and ahrd works of the then people and as a result their prior and princciple goals reamin indolence or did not get deserved output. By providing mobile phones people can use it in their way and do communication more easily than before. Consequently they can give more priority and efforts to their prime focus ratehr than wasting the same in the mere communication. So, it is evident that prime focus of technological advancement is quite different from the mentioned one in the prompt.
Counterintuitive idea can be that - if people could not get the leisure time or enough free time from the technological advancement then what is the use of it? As it si evident that the productivity of people has increased over time because of the innovation of many technological things it is also true that - technology has also brought many by-products as blessings for the layperson. Playing games, having quality time with family, making life easier than before are many of those. However, all of these are not the prime reasons behind the innvoation of techonological arguments - gaining expediancy it was. So, telling that augmentation is the aim of technological advancement might undercut the sole direction of the adavancement. Anotehr thing is that - the purposes of these technological sophistications are actually varried with people's motivationa dn priorities. There are people who will want to make full use of their leisure time and there will be ones who would like to give more time to theri families.
So, looking at the points mentioned above it can be properly said that - the sole purpose advancements in technology is to lessen the hard works of people, not to increase the leisure time; the by-product of the sophistication.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dvancement begets advancement'. As the prompt suggested that - the fundame...
^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...isure by providing more efficiency - is a oximoron by itself. How can person be m...
^
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
... advancement. Initially people inclined to to make their life easier so that they can...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1150, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to output'
Suggestion: to output
...eamin indolence or did not get deserved output. By providing mobile phones people can ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1262, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... communication more easily than before. Consequently they can give more priority and efforts...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, really, regarding, second, so, then, as to, for example, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 121.0 58.6224719101 206% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 43.0 12.9106741573 333% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4014.0 2235.4752809 180% => OK
No of words: 779.0 442.535393258 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15275994865 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.28304566267 4.55969084622 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12489631282 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 327.0 215.323595506 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419768934531 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1313.1 704.065955056 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5846505277 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.636363636 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6060606061 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60606060606 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344041433945 0.243740707755 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988460166144 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483194083374 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219988502667 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425136245009 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 100.480337079 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dvancement begets advancement'. As the prompt suggested that - the fundame...
^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...isure by providing more efficiency - is a oximoron by itself. How can person be m...
^
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
... advancement. Initially people inclined to to make their life easier so that they can...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1150, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to output'
Suggestion: to output
...eamin indolence or did not get deserved output. By providing mobile phones people can ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1262, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... communication more easily than before. Consequently they can give more priority and efforts...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, really, regarding, second, so, then, as to, for example, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 121.0 58.6224719101 206% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 43.0 12.9106741573 333% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4014.0 2235.4752809 180% => OK
No of words: 779.0 442.535393258 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15275994865 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.28304566267 4.55969084622 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12489631282 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 327.0 215.323595506 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419768934531 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1313.1 704.065955056 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5846505277 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.636363636 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6060606061 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60606060606 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344041433945 0.243740707755 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988460166144 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483194083374 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219988502667 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425136245009 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 100.480337079 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.