The graphs below show the number of men and women in full and part time employment in Australia between 1973 and 1993 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

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The graphs below show the number of men and women in full and part-time employment in Australia between 1973 and 1993.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The four line graphs illustrate the percentage of both male and female populations from all age groups of Australia present in permanent and part-time job in a twenty year span from 1973 to 1993. Here the doted line represents data from 1973 and the continued line means data from 1993.

The first and third graphs describes the percentage of male workers in a stable income and in a side job. We can see that in 1973, 50-80% of teen boys were in a fixed income whereas only 30-50% of them was earning in 1993. More than 80% adults were in a full-time job which dropped slightly to 70% over the twenty years gap. 20-80% of the older men (over 60 years olds) were still present in fixed position in the past. However, 55 or older men had a declined value in job market and were only comprised of 70% of the office in 1993.
According to the third graph, less than 10% of male earner prioritised part-time chores as their livlihood in 1973. On the other hand, upto 25% of the teens and yound adults were interested in having a side job but keened on a permanent post as they grew older.

The second and fourth graph depict the scenerio for women in working environment. Less than 60% of women were allowed a fixed position in office in both times. Only 50% of the young girls had a full-time job which changed to 20-55% in later years. But women became less focused on career as they matured. Similar words can be used to describe their presence in contractual working situation in 1973; merely a 20%. Contradictly, more than 30% females had a side earning in 1993. 20-30% teens and 20-35% adults had a chance for earning money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...es had a side earning in 1993 2030 teens and 2035 adults had a chance for earning...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, second, still, third, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1288.0 965.302439024 133% => OK
No of words: 297.0 196.424390244 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3367003367 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24937497696 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 106.607317073 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 388.8 283.868780488 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 297.0 22.4926829268 1320% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1288.0 112.824112599 1142% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 297.0 22.9334400587 1295% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 69.0 5.23603664747 1318% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132617039677 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132617039677 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786616227464 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291711551135 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 147.5 13.2329268293 1115% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -204.6 61.2550243902 -334% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 115.6 10.3012195122 1122% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.37 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.08 8.06136585366 261% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 11.4329268293 455% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.8 10.9970731707 1098% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 52.0 11.0658536585 470% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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