traveling in their own country benefit more than traveling to foreign countries - sohrab
Many people believe that traveling in their own country benefit more than traveling to foreign countries; on the other hand, there are some other people who believe that traveling to the foreign countries benefit more than traveling in their own country. I believe that the first group are right because of some reasons.
First of all, traveling in our own country has some advantages for the economy of our country. To explain more, when people decide to go to travel, they have to find a place to live in, they have to use gas for driving, and they have to eat something; they, as a result, should pay some money for the mentioned activities. Moreover, the money that they spend sometimes contain very large amount of cash. This money is a biggest help for the economy of the destination area. For example, when people spend their money for the hotels, restaurants, and other places, they, as a result, are helping the people who are living and working in the destination place; as a result, all of this sequences lead the society to have more powerful economy.
In addition, traveling in our own country help us to become more familiar with our diverse culture. For example, last year I went to the Tabriz, which is the one of five biggest cities in my country. Tabriz is one of the biggest cities in our country, where the people in there are mostly speaks in turkey, I, as a result, became very familiar with the culture of Azari people. Also, there are many tombs of famous people in the Tabriz; for example, Sattar khan, who was the leader of a political movement in many years age.
Finally, traveling in your own country help you to spend fewer money than traveling to foreign countries; to explain more, when you decide to travel in your country, you need to spend money for your hotel, food, and gas; on the other hand, when you decide to go to another country, you should pay some huge money for airplane ticket, for visa process, for expensive hotels, and for expensive transportation systems like car renting. As a result, when people decide to travel in their own country, there is no need to spend your money a lot, also there is no need to spend a lot time for visa process.
Overall, I believe that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries because of the mentioned reasons.
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the first group are right because of some reasons.
the first group is right because of some reasons.
Sentence: This money is a biggest help for the economy of the destination area.
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Suggestion: Refer to a and biggest
Sentence: For example, when people spend their money for the hotels, restaurants, and other places, they, as a result, are helping the people who are living and working in the destination place; as a result, all of this sequences lead the society to have more powerful economy.
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Sentence: In addition, traveling in our own country help us to become more familiar with our diverse culture.
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Sentence: Tabriz is one of the biggest cities in our country, where the people in there are ...
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Suggestion: Refer to in and there
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Average Word Length: 4.49 4.6
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Sentence Length SD: 16.748 7.5
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