Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
-say why you would like to go on the trip.
-suggest what you could do to help during the trip.
-ask details about the trip.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter in regards to seek your approval for the three-day school trip to Germany in which you want parents to along with school children.
I was planning a vacation with my wife to see my cousin in Berlin since she was studying master's course at Technical University in Berlin. I was excited after hearing the news from my child that the school is organizing a trip to Germany. Therefore, I request you to please consider me and my wife to come along with students.
Since my cousin is already residing in Berlin, I can inform her about this school trip, and I assure you she will be volunteering as a tour guide to show the beautiful destinations during the entire trip as she loves to travel. If you will approve us to come along with the pupils on the trip, I will update my cousin to make further arrangements.
If that is not too much to ask, could you please provide us the specific details such as planned dates and departure time from the Airport?
I am hoping for a positive response from your end.
Yours faithfully,
Shwatank Bhasin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...r Principal I am writing this letter in regards to the threeday school trip to Germany in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 864.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54736842105 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43613153218 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573684210526 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 269.1 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 190.0 16.3608247423 1161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 864.0 76.5299724578 1129% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 190.0 16.8248392259 1129% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.0 4.34317383033 507% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163988788947 0.216113520407 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163988788947 0.0766984524023 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.092617315572 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065772446281 0.0580467560999 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 95.0 8.37731958763 1134% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -104.45 70.7449484536 -148% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 75.0 7.45979381443 1005% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.29 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.55 7.59969072165 218% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 8.62886597938 614% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 78.0 8.54432989691 913% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 95.0 8.15463917526 1165% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.