It is important to consider that whether commercial companies should provide recreational activities and social programs or not. Some individuals admit that these facilities ought to be offered by government to the society; however, I disagree with this notion, and I think these can be offered by multinational companies, it will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, companies can reap a good number of benefits by organizing special event for community, first and foremost reason is that they serve for massive platform for marketing and promotion. In other words, sports have a unique ability to unite people regardless of their age and status, which can be taken as an advantages by multinational corporations for advertisement of their product. To cite an example, renowned companies such as coca-cola and pepsi are two soft drink corporations mostly organised cricket and football competition in their local community and initially, this may seem likely loss-making approach; however, by sponsoring tournament they earned huge amount of money.
In addition, providing social facilities also bring countless benefits for the company, firstly, a thriving company is not only essential for carrying out business but also for ensuring co-operation from society. If company organised small tournament, it will increase the bond between organisation and public. Moreover, technology has been ushered a sea change in every field as a result sedentary lifestyle has been adopted by people which leads numerous health hassles, in order to get rid from diseases individual like to take part in such competitions. Apart from this, employees family members get a chance to meet the employer and enhance the social bindings.
In conclusion, given aforementioned information, it is abundantly clear that although such facilities should be organised by multinational corporations, it will bring numerous prons for themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, apart from, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47796610169 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98504170854 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613559322034 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 295.0 20.2975951904 1453% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1616.0 106.682146367 1515% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 295.0 20.7667163134 1421% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 159.0 7.06120827912 2252% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242541603315 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242541603315 0.084324248473 288% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133540536307 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211360125151 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 151.9 13.0946893788 1160% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -244.87 50.2224549098 -488% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 120.7 11.3001002004 1068% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.98 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 22.93 8.58950901804 267% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 9.78957915832 603% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.0 10.1190380762 1186% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 59.0 10.7795591182 547% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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