Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time Which of these solutions do you think is better Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Young minds always want to be in their personal space. One can always see them disturbed when their privacy is taken away from them. Due to which they are always eager for independence from their parents. To my view, it is ok to wish to be independent. It let's that person grow and allows his/her own space.
Taking an example, my childhood friend Kritika had always been fun, loving and enjoying her life. We both used to hang out after our classes; she used to spend alot of money on food, stationaries (which she wouldn't even touch after buying it), clothes, etc. After her 10th, she went out of the city to study, as she wanted some independence from her familly. After some years, when I met her, she was totally a different person. She told me how she had learned handling money, the household chores, studying and even she had starting doing a part time job. That day, I had seen a different person in my friend who was responsible, independent and hardworking person. Thus, according to me independence let the child to grow, to think practically.
What if one day your parents meet with an accident? We have never considered this situation. Being with parents, we become so dependent on them that we never care about the hardwork that they do. If we live independently it will make us a more responsible person. We are always relied on our parents for the dinner, buying essential items, our tuition fees and in some cases washing clothes. Once the young adults would be independent they will have to do everything by their self, from washing clothes to ironing them, buying groceries to making food, paying the rent, bills, etc. We get to know our responsibilties when we have no one to depend on.
In contrast, if the young ones live with their families, they won't be able to face the world as they have never opened themself. They always live in their comfort zones which limits their activities. When they take up job, they are not able to handle failure and end up doing something wrong. But, when these young ones are given their independence at an early age, they learned to tackle such situations are ready to face the world at an early stage. Thus, according to me, young adults should be given independence from their parents, to inculcate sense of responsibility, hardwork and managing failures.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... person grow and allows hisher own space Taking an example my childhood friend Kr...
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...of money on food stationaries which she wouldnt even touch after buying it clothes etc ...
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Suggestion: to handle
... person She told me how she had learned handling money the household chores studying and...
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Suggestion: part-time
...dying and even she had starting doing a part time job That day I had seen a different per...
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...t the child to grow to think practically What if one day your parents meet with a...
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...e day your parents meet with an accident We have never considered this situation ...
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...bilties when we have no one to depend on In contrast if the young ones live with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, as to, in contrast, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54791154791 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4461282707 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506142506143 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 407.0 20.1344086022 2021% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1851.0 100.406767564 1844% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 407.0 20.6045352989 1975% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 52.0 5.45110844103 954% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254513438508 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254513438508 0.076458572812 333% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156739307495 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05300337231 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 203.5 11.7677419355 1729% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -324.71 58.1214874552 -559% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 159.7 10.1575268817 1572% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.59 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.11 8.01818996416 326% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 10.002688172 540% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 164.8 10.0537634409 1639% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 54.0 10.247311828 527% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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