IN TODAY'S MODERN TIMES, MOST CHILDREN PREFER TO PLAY GAMES ON THE COMPUTER RATHER THAN ANY OTHER SPORTS OR OUTDOOR GAMES. IN THIS ESSAY, I WILL DISCUSS WHAT I THINK IS THE REASON BEHIND THIS AND EXPLAIN WHY IT IS A NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT
TO BEGIN WITH, COMPUTER GAMES CAN BE PLAYED ANYWHERE. IN MOST CITIES, ESPECIALLY PLACES SUCH AS CONDO OR AN APARTMENT, WIDE EMPTY SPACES ARE ALMOST NON-EXISTENT, WHICH MAKES IT IMPOSSIBLE TO PLAY SPORTS SUCH AS SOCCER OR FOOTBALL. AS A RESULT, CHILDREN ARE LEFT WITH NO CHOICE BUT TO SETTLE ON GAMES AVAILABLE ON THEIR PERSONAL COMPUTER. ANOTHER CAUSE IS THE NUMEROUS VARIETY OF GAMES, CHILDREN COULD CHOOSE FROM BASED ON THEIR SET OF SKILLS, PREFERENCES AND GENDER, WHICH MEANS THAT, IT CATERS TO EVERYONE, UNLIKE SOME SPORTS SUCH AS BASKETBALL THAT REQUIRES A CHILD TO BE OF CERTAIN HEIGHT OR SKILLS TO BE ABLE TO PLAY.
CHILDREN' EXCESSIVE ENGAGEMENT TO COMPUTER GAMES IS A DANGEROUS SITUATION THAT COULD LEAD TO MULTIPLE PROBLEMS.ONE OF THIS IS THE POSSIBILITY OF DEVELOPING MEDICAL ISSUES SUCH AS MALNUTRITION AND CERTAIN EYE PROBLEM. PLAYERS TEND TO SPEND HOURS AND HOURS IN FRONT OF THE COMPUTER, AND BECAUSE OF THIS, NOT ONLY WILL THEY HAVE EYE STRAIN DUE TO THE HARSH LIGHT COMING FROM THE SCREEN, BUT ALSO BE AT RISK OF BEING OBESE DUE TO LACK OF PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES. ANOTHER DILEMMA IS BEING SOCIALLY ISOLATED. THERE'S A TENDENCY FOR PLAYERS TO BE SO ENGROSS WITH VIDEO GAME THAT THEY WILL AVOID GOING OUT OF THEIR ROOM, LESSENING INTERACTION WITH OTHER PEOPLE. AS A RESULT, THEY WILL LOSE THEIR SOCIAL SKILLS, WHICH EVENTUALLY RESULT TO THEM BEING ALONE.
IN CONCLUSION, THE CONVENIENCE AND HUGE SELECTION OF COMPUTER GAMES ARE JUST SOME OF THE FACTORS THAT CONTRIBUTES TO THE POPULARITY OF CHILDREN AMONGST CHILDREN, WHICH COULD LEAD TO HEALTH ISSUES AND ISOLATION FROM OTHER PEOPLE.
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...EXPLAIN WHY IT IS A NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT TO BEGIN WITH, COMPUTER GAMES CAN BE PLA...
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... COMPUTER GAMES CAN BE PLAYED ANYWHERE. IN MOST CITIES, ESPECIALLY PLACES SUCH AS ...
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...IN HEIGHT OR SKILLS TO BE ABLE TO PLAY. CHILDREN EXCESSIVE ENGAGEMENT TO COMPUTE...
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...HER DILEMMA IS BEING SOCIALLY ISOLATED. THERES A TENDENCY FOR PLAYERS TO BE SO ENGROSS...
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...GE SELECTION OF COMPUTER GAMES ARE JUST SOME OF THE FACTORS THAT CONTRIBUTES TO THE POPULAR...
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...ISSUES AND ISOLATION FROM OTHER PEOPLE.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89423076923 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57892948743 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.3924020718 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.818181818 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3636363636 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189097551965 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741639498328 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620630008473 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130194392614 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572388446827 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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