The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The claim provided to us for analysis states that the best way to prepare the youth who would be taking up leadership positions is by instilling in them a sesnse of cooperation, not competition. There are many examples, over the years that bolster the fact that the development of a nation lies in the hands of its youth. In the current age, young people are making significant strides in various domains in the society, be it in government, different industries or other fields.
When young individuals with a clear intention come together, they leave no stone unturned in achieving the intended goal. Today in developing countries like India, multiple government positions are being occupied by young leaders. They represent the voice of millions of people of the nation, they have incessant ideas for the growth and betterment of the people, they put their ideas forward and collaborate with multiple stakeholders to make sure their their motives are achieved. Even in industries, the young population is a significant contributor. They are full of ideas, ambitious and hardworking and hence all set to achieve the desired outcomes. Other fields such as arts, psychology military, airforce, etc are also experiencing the rise of powerful young leaders.
A large number of factors contribute to making sure that the youth excels in leadership positions. An innovative mindset, experimental attitude, the ability of persevering each time they fail, the ability to collaborate and cooperate and ask for assistance when required, the ability to raise their voice to ask questions or provide solutions are few of the many traits that the youth needs to be well-equipped with. All of these traits need to be instilled in the young people by the society over a period of time. Hence, like stated in the claim by the author, instilling them with a sense of cooperation is extremely important. Nevertheless, even a healthy sense of competition is necessary for growth and development
A healthy competition ensures that the participating stakeholders come up with better ideas, methods of implementation and put in their best efforts to achive the desired outcomes. Hence, young people should be made familiar with the concept of healthy competition, where the individual wants to win not to defeat someone else, but to achieve the larger goal. For example, if two teams in a company are pitching for a project, they should do so in a fair manner. And ultimately reaslise that either team selected and deemed the best would ensure that their company ends up with more profits. The idea of a fair win, not resorting to unethical or pernicious behavior while in a competition should be focussed on along with instilling a sense of cooperation in the young people
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: their
...with multiple stakeholders to make sure their their motives are achieved. Even in industrie...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
... the rise of powerful young leaders. A large number of factors contribute to making sure that ...
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Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... the young people by the society over a period of time. Hence, like stated in the claim by the...
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Line 7, column 446, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a fair manner" with adverb for "fair"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tching for a project, they should do so in a fair manner. And ultimately reaslise that either te...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, while, as for, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10154525386 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90901321564 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509933774834 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4726110868 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.388888889 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325072438295 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882217960184 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613798271716 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189464796569 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542398871972 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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