A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavour additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In this statement, the author concludes that the cases of headaches would be reduced by the usage of salicylate and there would be fewer people who will suffer from headaches. However, the author supports the argument with the three assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weakened the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all, the writer presumes without evidence the study which has concluded that the number of headaches has been reduced has some credibility and reliability. On which basis the conclusion or result has stated. Was the questionnaire used to ask people or which method is used to do this study? Did you lose any patients while doing the study, which community people were there? The study occurred in both genders. Various questions are required to ask to give some reliability to the study. The main thing is was the study published somewhere? Various questions have been objected to from this result. For example, this study can also be done randomly without any evidence or the process which needs to be considered. The result of that study wouldn't be applicable or cannot follow. If this case is true, then the author's claim is not warranted and his suggestion that there is no use of those studies which hasn't appropriate background. Hence, believing that would put in more danger.
Second of all, where was the side effect of the aspirin? There are many effects which can occur due to aspirin-like it can lead to brain stroke because it causes dilation of the blood vessels and it's not good to use frequently and this is concluded by the author, there is a mild threat to life but if the life is dreadful than this danger is a major issue. If this scenario is true, then the author's contention can be avoided, but if it can't be proven false then it may lead to an unexpected or reversed scenario.
Finally, is there any disparity between the distribution of food among people? Is it good to add in the food and give it to all? Wasn't that caused harm for stroke patients, or cardiovascular ischemic patients? What is the plan for that? Who will be responsible? If the death of immunocompromised patients. It has also a bad effect on patients with hypertension because ultimately it will disturb the body mechanism. It should be considered that this food has no age barrier. Hence, it will be distributed among young children. Will it prevent a problem or create havoc for the public. If a parent is educated and knows the medical background. Then they are safe, but this isn't a frequent public event. Mostly, are not aware and believe in the market and the food which is available for them. Considering this scenario it is risky to add it as a flavour. The author assumes that adding the flavour in the food won't help in resolving the issue, but would increase the mortality rate rather than preventing a problem. If this is not true then the author's assertion is invalid and his recommendation does little to convince
In conclusion, there are various methods to recommend drugs or medicines to patients and these things shouldn't be kept open to many people. There is no fixed protocol followed by all for a particular problem that is happening in our body. It is good to do research, but before implementing the reliability of the study is important.
However, as it stands, the argument relies on three unfounded assumptions that render its conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Thus the author needs to provide additional evidence regarding the safety of the human being without implementation of the aspirin to all.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 38 15
No. of Words: 619 350
No. of Characters: 2911 1500
No. of Different Words: 280 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.988 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.703 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.705 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.289 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.782 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.553 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.21 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.395 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... usage of salicylate and there would be less people who will suffer from headache . ...
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Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ess people who will suffer from headache . However, the author supports the argume...
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Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: VBZ_VBD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...me reliability to the study. Main thing is was the study published somewhere? Ther...
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Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...reliability to the study. Main thing is was the study published somewhere? There ar...
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Line 3, column 778, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...be considered. The result of that study wouldnt be applicable or cannot follow. If this...
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Line 3, column 838, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e or cannot follow. If this case is true , then the authors claim is not warranted...
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Line 3, column 944, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
... there is no use of those studies which hasnt appropriate background. Hence, believin...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...ntly and this is concluded by the author,there is a mild threat to life but if the lif...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...sue. If this scenario is true, then the authors contention can be avoided, but if it ca...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...rs contention can be avoided, but if it cant be proven false then it may lead to an ...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...rs contention can be avoided, but if it cant be proven false then it may lead to an ...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Wasn't
... to add in the food and give it to all. Wasnt that caused harm for stroke patients,or...
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Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , or
...snt that caused harm for stroke patients,or for cardiovascular ischemic patients? W...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...plan for that. Who will be responsible? If the death of immunocompromised patients...
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Line 7, column 683, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ackground. Then they are safe, but this isnt a frequent public event. Mostly, are no...
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Line 7, column 950, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he food wont help in resolving the issue ,but would increase the mortality rate ra...
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Line 7, column 1053, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...a problem. If this is not true then the authors assertion is invalid and his recommenda...
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Line 9, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... medicines to patients and these things shouldnt be kept openly to many people. There is...
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Line 11, column 147, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...rsuasive at best and specious at worst. Thus the author needs to provide additional ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 47.0 19.6327345309 239% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 11.1786427146 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3013.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 618.0 441.139720559 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87540453074 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98594081286 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76902134126 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 204.123752495 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482200647249 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 939.6 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 19.7664670659 187% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.0720531569 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4324324324 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7027027027 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62162162162 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0856025937912 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.019468833786 0.0743258471296 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309285779886 0.0701772020484 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0487753998266 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338471779699 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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