The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
For a society to prepare its young people to be a part of government, industry or other fields, it is necessary to instill sense of cooperation rather than competition. I strongly disagree this for the following two reasons.
To begin with, the current young people are the future leaders where they enter into various important fields of a country which constitute to the development of a nation. For them to be effective leaders and enterprenuers, it is important to teach them about the existing competition in the market and how, one can sustain the market with such a competition. For example, let us consider one of the great rulers of India, Chatrapathi Shivaji. When he was young, he was trained very efficiently with all the required combat skills that are needed for a war. In addition, he was also taught how strong, an opponent could be which is indirectly aquainting him about how a competition in that corresponding field could be present. This acquaintance helped him in predetermination of such competitors and be ready with alternate plans for any surprising and unexpected response from the opponent in the war. It is because of this great skills of withstanding in a war, along with prior knowledge of a competition helped him in reaching such great position and thus obtaining title as "Chatrapati". From above instance, we can see that teaching about a competition is very much needed for any young person to achieve great success.
To continue with, let us consider a scenario as below. For instance, say a company "A" is being newly started by a group of young and passionate people in semiconductor market. Let us assume that these people are building very good products which can have a huge demand in the market. However, we need to understand that "good" is a relative term which is always used in comparision with an additional person or thing. Hence, the product which these young passionate people considering as good may not actually be better than any competitior who manufactures similar semiconductor products. Perhas, these young people might have not taught about the competition which otherwise would have helped them in understanding the competition and accordingly, build the products. hence, awareness about competition plays a major role to achieve greater heights in any field.
On the contrary, some might argue that without a sense of cooperation, a group of people cannot become leaders or industrial experts. However, it has to be noted that awareness about competition comes at first than instilling a sense of cooperation because when there is no awareness about the existing competition, all the hardwork and intelligence that is kept in any work will be freckless as every field do have competition about gaining the market which is not possible without awareness of competition
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, first, hence, however, may, so, still, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14163090129 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13305602915 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484978540773 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4586156095 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.105263158 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5263157895 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27918952745 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908267992022 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910777703017 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21105835559 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116184038826 0.0667264976115 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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