Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well
In this progressive and sophisticated world, there are a wide variety of factors that can lead to people's success, such as being perseverance, skillful, and etc. A controversial question, which is often raised in this regard is that whether trying new things and taking risks give rise to success or not. While some people are inclined towards the idea that there is no need to take risks for being successful, others, on the other hand, are against this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that the influence of taking risks and trying new things in being successful is indisputable and immense. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason coming to my mind is that people's growth comes with leaving their comfort zone and taking on new challenges. Without any doubt, by taking risks people will confront countless hardships and setbacks, however, by being diligent one can overcome all of these challenges. Besides, this approach brings about new concepts and ideas that pursuing them may completely change people's lives. For instance, if one with a great talent in the electrician who has a secure job in a governmental office leaves his work and concentrates on gaining first-hand experiences and knowledge in the area of his giftedness, this decision may lead to unbelievable ideas, consequently impressive results like inventing new electric devices; although it was seemed a troublesome situation with vague future at first.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that trying new things can be a gateway to a successful career. It is undeniable fact that people who try new things have a wide range of skills and broad scope of knowledge which help them to accomplish multiple tasks. Such people have added advantages over their competitors in a highly competitive job market. Since in modern society, employers have a strong tendency to recruit versatile employees to benefit from their various skills and knowledge, those people can definitely get the job position. For instance, although learning a new language is very difficult and time-consuming, bilingual people are always among the applicants who can stand among their competitors due to acquiring this significant skill.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, it is crystal clear that trying new things can benefit people immensely and people should encourage to follow this approach to be successful. The first merit of this attitude is it can assist people to grow and find new ideas that may lead to huge success. Moreover, this way gives rise to a triumph in people’s careers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...ide variety of factors that can lead to peoples success, such as being perseverance, sk...
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Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
..., such as being perseverance, skillful, and etc. A controversial question, which is ofte...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ue to acquiring this significant skill. To summarize, from what has been discuss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09772727273 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8132058343 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547727272727 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0720363159 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.941176471 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8823529412 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194795358117 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073131785067 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445460980249 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130980778047 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307869520886 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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