Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
While it may be true that evaluating teaching effectiveness by students does not make a big difference at getting jobs after graduation, the author's argument does not make a cogent case. It is easy to understand that student grades may not be related to their actual academic achievement and their future jobs, but the author needs verifiable evidences to prove his/her recommendation.
First of all, the author claims that student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent; however, he/she does not mention about statistic which can make a big difference in his/her recommendation. We do not know the number of students admissions in every year in Omega university. For example, if the total number of students have increased by 30 percent during last fifteen years, so rising grades by 30 percent cannot be a true result.
In addition, the author does not mention about similarities and differences between Omega university and Alpha university which can make a different perspective because there are many factors that can affect student’s achievement and job finding other than just getting high grades. For example, Alpha university may have smarter students with more confidence in job interviews compare to Omega university. Or Alpha university may offer interview workshops to prepare students for their future job interviews which can be a reason for graduated students to get professional jobs successfully. Moreover, teaching methods in two different universities need to be addressed. For example, Alpha university might have more modern lab instruments that can help students to learn more efficient. As a result, students in Alpha university will have more knowledges and confidence in their job interviews.
Last but not least, the author does not talk about job offering during last fifteen years. Getting a job fifteen years ago was not hard as much as today because of less competition. In addition, the author does not indicate the major differences in two universities which can affect the job marketing result. For example, Omega university may have more students with nutrition major which can make it harder for them to get a job. Or Alpha university may have more engineering students who can get jobs easy because of just higher job availability.
The author can make his/her claim persuasive when he/she gathers information about similarities and differences in two universities, total number of students, and job marketing. After answering these questions, the author can make such a conclusion to terminate student evaluation of professors.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2124 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.143 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.847 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.017 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.399 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 142, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94936360504 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453431372549 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3343948937 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.888888889 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225039399599 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932918930504 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450294716967 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137012597812 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525671732877 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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