Commencing with, they do not only complete their basic needs but also adopte their better life style. To explain it, when masses spend longer time on their work then they are able to gain more and more money because of their hard work. So, with this money they purchased those things which show their hai status sectors expensive cars house furnitures and phones. Hence ,in a society their names are added in which class persons as well as they are able to help to someone who needed it without any trouble.
However, there are several disadvantages with related to human beings. Firstly humans are faced many health issues when they do long time work.To Clarify it ,masses are spend their all time on work which are surprised many problems related to health because they have in under pressure as well as take more scratch to their work and they always do their work in sitting position. As a result, they face high blood pressure heart problem and become fatty which are make them weak. Secondly ,people's relationship bonding with their family members as well as with relatives become weak.Therefore,because of their work, they are not give time to family and relatives and also not celebrate functions and festivals with them which are heart their emotions of family members. Thus ,because of heart emotions , bonding with their families and relatives get weak.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: Rina Arora
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...hen they do long time work.To Clarify it ,masses are spend their all time on work ...
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...fatty which are make them weak. Secondly ,peoples relationship bonding with their ...
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...family members as well as with relatives become weak.Therefore,because of their w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1134.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 231.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90909090909 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38947105824 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5670995671 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.7311576399 49.4020404114 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4444444444 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0607845257101 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327695842435 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0198203684538 0.0667982634062 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0500532772068 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128601174055 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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