Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement mentions that the competition between students to get high grades will limit the efficiency of the education system. However, I do not agree with the prompt.
First of all, competition is not bad all the times, but actually it can make positive outcomes. The reason is people will try their best to get the best results which can be the encouragement for improvement at most situations. Imagine a student who does not put enough effort to study and get good grades. But, when she sees her classmates' high grades, she starts to feel that she is not a perfect student. Thus, she will try to spend necessary time to make sure that she will understand the concept and will get high scores as her classmates. In this situation, the competition is a very good trigger for students to learn the courses deeply.
In addition, the competition between students is not going to limit the quality of learning and teaching. It is obvious that it can make an education system even more efficient. Consider a teacher who wants to make sure all of her students will understand the course perfectly, so she will put all students' name and their scores on the board where all classmates can see them. This strategy can really make all students to study hard to get the best score they can. In this case, there is a very high possibility that competition will make more connection between teacher and her students to work on the course materials.
On the contrary, some parents and teachers may believe that the competition will ruin the education quality which can be true in some cases. For example, a sensitive high-school student may get jelous of her classmates who always achieve higher grades than her in chemistry classes. She may change her behaviour with them or get mad of them for different reasons so easily, so in this specific case, the competition will not lead to positive outcome. It acutually brings the confidence of that student low which can even cause future emotional problems for her. In addition, that student may not be willing to learn the concept correctly anymore because she only cares about her scores. She might even end up cheating on exams to get high score which is not good.
When students compete with each other in a correct way to get high grades, it will definitely bring the quality of education even higher.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a correct way" with adverb for "correct"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... When students compete with each other in a correct way to get high grades, it will definitely ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, thus, for example, in addition, first of all, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75735294118 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53646867649 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460784313725 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1558778071 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.05 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168983648339 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683598523202 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420833345012 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120045207629 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395862832832 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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