the diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park school since its construction in 1950.
summaries the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The diagrams show the differences of west park school in the years: 1950,1980, 2010.
by 1950, it was constructed next to the main road. It had four parts contain school, play ground, farmland and houses. the school was located above of right corner and playground was behind it. The farmland was located in blew of left corner and the houses was in front of it . The area of those parts was approximately equal. by 1080, the play ground remain without any changes, but the farmland use changes to sport field but the space of that was without changes.
The area of the houses part divided to tow parts. One of them for car park, another one allotted for science block that related to school. On that year the school was expanded, and the houses demolished in order to making additional school building and creation of car park.
By 2010 , school building and sciences block remained unchanged but the space of play ground decline in order to make sport field. the sport field was removed and gave its space to car park . During this period the school building has increased in size and car park has created and enlarged and the play ground and sport field has reduced in size.
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It had four parts contain school, play ground, farmland and houses.
It had four parts containing school, play ground, farmland and houses.
Sentence: The farmland was located in blew of left corner and the houses was in front of it .
Description: The word in is not usually used as an adverb, particle
Suggestion: Refer to in blew
the play ground remain without any changes
the play ground remains without any changes
The area of the houses part divided to tow parts.
The area of the house part was divided to two parts.
another one allotted for science block that related to school.
another one is allotted for science block that is related to school.
in order to making additional school building
in order to make additional school building
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