AN OPPORTUNITY IS SOMETHING EVERYONE ALWAYS WAIT FOR. WHETHER WE USE IT PROPERLY DEPENDS ON ONE’S ABILITY . IN THIS COMPETATIVE WORLD , WE HAVE A DEDICATED ONE’S , STRUGGLING ONE’S, CREATIVE ONE’S , LAZY ONE’S . BUT A CHANCE IS GLOBAL TO EVERYONE . GETTING IT MIGHT BE LUCK FACTOR OR DESERVE FACTOR . USUALLY WHEN WE GO TO INTERVIEW WE ALWAYS COME ACROSS PLENTY OF COMPETATORS , SOME THINK EXPERIENCE IS SOMETHING EVERYONE NEEDS AS ELIGILIBITY CRITERIA . I COMPLETELY OPPOSE THIS IDEA , WHEN YOU HAVE NECESSARY TALENT BUT DUE TO LACK OF EXPERIENCE YOU ARE NEVER A UNDESERVED ONE.
IN CONTRARY TO THIS , WHEN HAVE A CALCULATION IN FRONT OF YOU , ALWAYS WILL FIND A EASY WAY TO SOLVE THAN A PROCEDURAL METHOD . EVEN IN LIFE IF YOU HAVE PROLEM YOU TEND SOLVE IT YOUR WAYS THAN BY ASKING A EXPERIENCED ONE .
SECONDLY , THERE IS NO SAYING THAT A EXPERIENCED ONE WILL ALWAYS DO WORK PROPERLY OR HE DOESN’T HAVE FLAWS . HOW YOU APPROACH YOUR WORK IS WHAT MATTERS THAN HOW WELL YOU HAVE PRACTICED IT . IN A FOOTBALL MATCH , IT DOESN’T MATTER IF YOU PRACTICED FOR DAYS , WHAT MATTERS IS HOW WELL YOU ARE GOING TO PLAY IN FINALS .
FINALLY , HUMAN IN EVERY SITUATION WILL THINK OF MAKING HIS WORK EASY AND CREATIVE ,NEVER IGNORE UNTIL IT GETS EXPERIENCE
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: Shahbaz Amin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... IS SOMETHING EVERYONE ALWAYS WAIT FOR. WHETHER WE USE IT PROPERLY DEPENDS ON ONE’S ABI...
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Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...USE IT PROPERLY DEPENDS ON ONE’S ABILITY . IN THIS COMPETATIVE WORLD , WE HAVE A D...
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...NE’S ABILITY . IN THIS COMPETATIVE WORLD , WE HAVE A DEDICATED ONE’S , STRUGGLING ...
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...TATIVE WORLD , WE HAVE A DEDICATED ONE’S , STRUGGLING ONE’S, CREATIVE ONE’S , LAZY...
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...ONE’S , STRUGGLING ONE’S, CREATIVE ONE’S , LAZY ONE’S . BUT A CHANCE IS GLOBAL TO ...
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...GLING ONE’S, CREATIVE ONE’S , LAZY ONE’S . BUT A CHANCE IS GLOBAL TO EVERYONE . GE...
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...E’S . BUT A CHANCE IS GLOBAL TO EVERYONE . GETTING IT MIGHT BE LUCK FACTOR OR DE...
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...ERYONE . GETTING IT MIGHT BE LUCK FACTOR OR DESERVE FACTOR . USUALLY WHEN WE GO ...
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...NE . GETTING IT MIGHT BE LUCK FACTOR OR DESERVE FACTOR . USUALLY WHEN WE GO TO I...
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Suggestion: To factor
...NG IT MIGHT BE LUCK FACTOR OR DESERVE FACTOR . USUALLY WHEN WE GO TO INTERVIEW WE AL...
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...MIGHT BE LUCK FACTOR OR DESERVE FACTOR . USUALLY WHEN WE GO TO INTERVIEW WE ALWA...
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...ALWAYS COME ACROSS PLENTY OF COMPETATORS , SOME THINK EXPERIENCE IS SOMETHING EVER...
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...G EVERYONE NEEDS AS ELIGILIBITY CRITERIA . I COMPLETELY OPPOSE THIS IDEA , WHEN YO...
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...CRITERIA . I COMPLETELY OPPOSE THIS IDEA , WHEN YOU HAVE NECESSARY TALENT BUT DUE ...
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...R A UNDESERVED ONE. IN CONTRARY TO THIS , WHEN HAVE A CALCULATION IN FRONT OF YOU...
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... WHEN HAVE A CALCULATION IN FRONT OF YOU , ALWAYS WILL FIND A EASY WAY TO SOLVE TH...
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Message: The adverb 'ALWAYS' is usually put between 'WILL' and 'FIND'.
Suggestion: WILL ALWAYS FIND
...EN HAVE A CALCULATION IN FRONT OF YOU , ALWAYS WILL FIND A EASY WAY TO SOLVE THAN A PROCEDURAL M...
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...SY WAY TO SOLVE THAN A PROCEDURAL METHOD . EVEN IN LIFE IF YOU HAVE PROLEM YOU TEN...
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...UR WAYS THAN BY ASKING A EXPERIENCED ONE . SECONDLY , THERE IS NO SAYING THAT A ...
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...BY ASKING A EXPERIENCED ONE . SECONDLY , THERE IS NO SAYING THAT A EXPERIENCED O...
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...O WORK PROPERLY OR HE DOESN’T HAVE FLAWS . HOW YOU APPROACH YOUR WORK IS WHAT MATT...
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...TERS THAN HOW WELL YOU HAVE PRACTICED IT . IN A FOOTBALL MATCH , IT DOESN’T MATTE...
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...HAVE PRACTICED IT . IN A FOOTBALL MATCH , IT DOESN’T MATTER IF YOU PRACTICED FOR ...
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...DOESN’T MATTER IF YOU PRACTICED FOR DAYS , WHAT MATTERS IS HOW WELL YOU ARE GOING ...
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...HOW WELL YOU ARE GOING TO PLAY IN FINALS . FINALLY , HUMAN IN EVERY SITUATION WI...
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... ARE GOING TO PLAY IN FINALS . FINALLY , HUMAN IN EVERY SITUATION WILL THINK OF ...
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...INK OF MAKING HIS WORK EASY AND CREATIVE ,NEVER IGNORE UNTIL IT GETS EXPERIENCE
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 58.6224719101 34% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1029.0 2235.4752809 46% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 214.0 442.535393258 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80841121495 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 4.55969084622 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71252481198 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 215.323595506 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593457943925 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 704.065955056 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4121966085 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.1538461538 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4615384615 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38461538462 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 7.80617977528 346% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121812885363 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467913899458 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484000712387 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727033879651 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360667820084 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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