Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do
people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these
dangers
In recent years we have seen a considerable rise in dangerous or extreme sports. This essay
shall discuss some of the main reasons why people engage in such sports and suggest ways
in which some risks involved in such sports can be reduced.
The main reason why people go for dangerous sports is that they get the thrill out of them.
They like taking risks. They like to challenge their abilities and potentials. They feel a sense
of satisfaction when they come face to face with fears while bungee jumping, rock climbing
and so on. In addition, going through a dangerous experience gives them courage and
confidence to face the hurdles of their daily life.
Another reason for pursuing such sports is that there is a lot of fame and money involved in
them. They get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings.
They make headlines in newspapers and TV News Channels. They feel great when their
name comes in the Guinness Book of World Records. Once they get famous they get a lot of
money also. For instance, many businesses hire them to endorse their products. They also
get jobs on the basis of such skills.
Many steps can be taken to reduce the risks are that involved. Firstly, these sports should be
done under strict supervision. All safety precautions should be taken. Such sports should be
performed after sufficient training and under supervision of adults. Sport companies which
cater to such sports should require a license for providing such training. Some people
suggest banning some sports. However, I do not believe that banning is a good solution. We
all know that forbidden fruits taste sweeter and people will do such sports in hiding which
would increase the risks involved.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, people do such sports for fun, for money and
for fame. However, such sports should be performed after sufficient training from licensed
companies and under some supervision
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, while, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97597597598 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42809088691 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534534534535 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7488425727 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.0416666667 106.682146367 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.875 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 24.0 4.38176352705 548% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283815787845 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079514081035 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771038299277 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080480645871 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696028815451 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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