Some believe that local communities should rely on citizen volunteers for projects benefiting those communities (e.g., organizing youth sports leagues and collecting donations for charity). Others believe that local communities are better served when professional community leaders with the necessary skills and time instead handle such projects.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Several programs and projects that are conducted by the local community, often require a great amount of funding and efforts to achieve its desired goals as well as prove beneficial for the entire community. Therefore, the major question that arises, while planning such projects is that who should take the responsibility for carrying out these programs efficiently? According to me, this major task should be assigned to the professional community leaders who have the necessary skill and time to handle such projects. Further, if possible, these professional leaders could take the help of the citizen volunteers to increase the efficacy of the project. My viewpoints are aptly illustrated due to the below-mentioned reasons and examples.
Firstly, depending upon the significance and scope of the project and its implementation, we cannot completely rely on the citizen volunteers. If the projects are on a long-term basis and require lots of time and effort, then the citizens who have other professional duties would not be able to dedicate their time and efforts to the required project. For instance, consider the projects that involve educational programs and rural development schemes that require the volunteers to go to different rural areas of the community and impart moral education to students who are poor and cannot afford basic education, or perhaps improve the existing conditions of the rural areas. Such programs would require people who can sacrifice their work and families and travel to different regions in order to help in resolving the problems faced by different people. In this case, it would be prudent to appoint a professional for handling this task, as he would have the required time and skill to carry out the entire process involved in this project efficiently.
However, in contrast to the above statement, sometimes citizen volunteers can be considered as a better option for carrying out certain projects successfully. For instance, consider a project that involves cleaning up the community parks and making them more environment friendly by planting more trees in them. If such projects involve the contribution of the citizens, then the implementation of such projects would be more effective and beneficial as the citizens would understand the importance of keeping their localities clean. Also, after the completion of the project, the citizens would be extra cautious while littering any place and would ensure the cleanliness of their surroundings. Further, the contribution of citizen volunteers could provide the necessary funding that is required for the project.
To sum up, the contribution of citizen volunteers could help in providing the necessary funding as well as their participation in this project could help them in gaining a moral lesson from any activity and thus ensuring the long-term efficacy of the project. However, whenever we are dealing with long-term projects that require a lot of time and effort, then in such cases it would be prudent to appoint a professional leader who can handle the situation well and carry out the overall implementation effectively. But, the involvement of both citizen volunteers and professional leaders can strengthen the impact of the project.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...arrying out these programs efficiently? According to me, this major task should be assigned to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in contrast, as well as, in contrast to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2748.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37769080235 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96941051901 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436399217221 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8621446006 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.666666667 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3888888889 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180258963315 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686267304585 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382164087801 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126434213021 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439633816434 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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