Celebrities such as singers and film stars earn too much money, buy too many goods and care too little about other people.
To what extent do you think this is true?
Should anything be done to change the situation?
many people think that famous people like singers and well-know actors have high earnings, they buy many expensive things and indifferent with people around them. In my opinion, I do not think this statement is completely true and belive that something can be done to change this situation.
It has a fact that most of people working in the entertainment industry earn a large amount of money every year. As the result, they can buy anything they want. however, most of the money they spend is for their work. For example, singers often use a lot of brand names in their new MVs, this makes them look more attractive and hence the viewers will be higher. Besides, they must work really hard to get this money. Although most famous actors have talent, they must practice a lot to develop themselves and be recognized by audience.
More people often think celebrities are the people who are stingy and selfish. however, not everyone is like that. There are many stars and idols willing to take part in volunteer work to help people who are less fortunate. many people also give part of their fortune to do charitable.
people often have a harsh and negative view of celebrities. A lot of famous actors and singers can not pursue their dream becaus they are misunderstood. To reduce this problem, the goverment and people need to make some changes. people need to respect the people who are in entertainers and treat them better. The government should put in place laws to limit false information about celebrities, thereby reducing antifans attacks on them.
Movie stars and singers have to put in a lot of effort to have a huge money and it's totally worth it.
- Celebrities such as singers and film stars earn too much money buy too many goods and care too little about other people To what extent do you think this is true Should anything be done to change the situation 61
- Celebrities such as singers and film stars earn too much money buy too many goods and care too little about other people To what extent do you think this is true Should anything be done to change the situation 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, hence, however, if, look, really, so, well, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78200692042 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44906934113 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550173010381 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1299176075 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7777777778 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0555555556 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212951684027 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664657654667 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447419017788 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122631999051 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596863480096 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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