Write a narrative essay about an object (gift/souvenir/possesion...) that is meaningful to you.
When I was 2 years old, I had received a small, cute present, which I never thought it would be a precious, long-lasting one for being with me and helping me through my childhood.
Since I was too little to have any consciousness, I had asked my dad about what happened on that day. It was a sunny day with the sun was nearly on top of our heads, everything come up at my house. First, I got out of bed, ate breakfast like every single day, but I had never known it would turn out to be a remarkable day with the most dangerous experience as being a little 2-year-old girl. My dad prepared tools, and I did not know why he had the courage to piercing my ears by himself, at home, not at any hospital or credible places. After that, I was such a crybaby for quite a long, while everyone in my family was just laughing at me and they had to pat me on the back and distracted me by pointing something from far away.
Don't get yourself being thrived away, the present here is a pair of silver earrings made by my dad, who was a silversmith, just right the time he knew I was a girl. It was a small round earring with a little ball swinging the circle, it was such a simple but pretty one that everyone complimented and even asked me where to buy it. He did think of what size when wearing it not too big for a little girl but not too small for a grown-up one, this made me surprised when noticing all the time back then till now. And when I realized, it had been with me for 19 years helping me been through all big milestones, and sometimes it was kinda fun to play with.
Everything cannot be told its full meaning but the one who most attached to know it best. I am being proud of having this earring and really appreciate my dad's work, with his underlying love and efforts making it priceless.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Don't
...y pointing something from far away. Dont get yourself being thrived away, the pr...
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Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bests', 'wells'?
Suggestion: bests; wells
...ut the one who most attached to know it best. I am being proud of having this earrin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, really, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 7.0 300% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 54.0 5.60731707317 963% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 965.302439024 151% => OK
No of words: 350.0 196.424390244 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.15142857143 4.92477711251 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 3.73543355544 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39176990225 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 106.607317073 179% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545714285714 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 283.868780488 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 1.53170731707 783% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.7330962368 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.083333333 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1666666667 22.9334400587 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.38 11.4140731707 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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