TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Nowadays, the world has placed a premium on knowledge one can obtain from a wide range of sources. Although a various array of people advocate it is of importance that individuals acquire knowledge, especially in critical events, others hold opposite a perspective. I profoundly subscribe to this consensus that claims people are required to be aware of different events of the whole world. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the following essay.
The first reason I should mention is that despite the fact that a large amount of news is stressful, it is of paramount importance to be aware of everything. In modern society, we either encounter plenty of negative events such as war, pandemic, and inflation or plenty of good news such as new inventions, finding a new drug, and way of treatment of a disease. We are not required to be heavily loaded with being aware of all of the events in great details, but having a decent knowledge in different areas in mandatory in modern world. As an example, gaining information about the latest medical development helps us to find a solution for our disease. Consequently, if we can update our understanding about the entire world, we are able to engage in those information in bettering our lives.
Another reason that I should add is that to keep abreast of a fast-changing and competitive society, we entail gaining information in a collection of areas. Humans encountering a degree of experience are able to participate in different groups and are able to advance their notions. In addition, People who are versatile and expert are valued in the modern world. For instance, they might be employed in higher positions, since they are able to engage in their knowledge gained in years. Moreover, attending different groups of people, they are able to address their notions. This is critically important because it is essential for humans to be able to interact with others to fulfill their innate desire of socializing.
All in all, the importance of being aware about all events and the necessity of being an adept person are the reasons why I agree with this argument.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...o be heavily loaded with being aware of all of the events in great details, but having a d...
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Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'decent knowledge'.
Suggestion: decent knowledge
...the events in great details, but having a decent knowledge in different areas in mandatory in mode...
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Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
... entire world, we are able to engage in those information in bettering our lives. Another rea...
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Line 5, column 723, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill their innate desire of socializing. All in all, the importance of being awar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95027624309 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84846147807 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513812154696 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.169613694 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117080332033 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394720877027 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257341569355 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078406976127 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179695568217 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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