"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
while it seems to be legitimate to save money by signing contract with buzzoff for all pest control services, the author's argument doesn'r make a cogent case for the inherent correlation between the damage the companies made and cost reducing strategies. Although it might be assigning buzzoff as the desirable partner, the argument is rife with loopholes and untenbale assumptions, and thus, is not strong enough to ground the proposal.
The author indicates that buzzoff made a significant lower value destruction compared with that of fly-away company. The situations are, however, different and the damages are not directly comparable. Firstly, the total worth of food needs further investigation. The destruction ratios are ought to be taken into consideration instead of the absolute value. For instance, it is possible that the total value of food at Palm City which is taken care of by buzzoff company is 10 times larger than that in wintervale which is accountable to fly-away company, while the value damage is only 2 times higher. In that is the case, the buzzoff company do a better job in preserving the food. Secondly, the locations are different which means the climate and the local ecosystem may also have an impact on the outcome of bug-killing. if the wind is strong in wintervale, the pesticide may be dessipated in a small amount of time, making the storage environment less toxic for food. thus the fly-away company itself does not own the credit of doing less damage. only if these factors can be controled for comparison, can the decision made by the author to be correct.
The author also demonstrates that returning to buzzoff is the best way to save money for the company, but this conclusion is falsely drawn because they have not taken other elements in food storage into consideration. pest control is only one aspect of the cost. Warehouse rent, the security, and the logistics are other sides which requires large bunks of money input and can broach budget control. that is to say, even if the cost of pest-killing services cannot be cut, the company can think of changing other contracted partners for money saving purposes.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Minimum four paragraphs wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1761 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.878 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.62 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.165 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
while it seems to be legitimate to save money...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...zoff for all pest control services, the authors argument doesnr make a cogent case for ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 826, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...n impact on the outcome of bug-killing. if the wind is strong in wintervale, the p...
^^
Line 3, column 974, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...torage environment less toxic for food. thus the fly-away company itself does not ow...
^^^^
Line 3, column 974, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...torage environment less toxic for food. thus the fly-away company itself does not ow...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1053, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
...ot own the credit of doing less damage. only if these factors can be controled for c...
^^^^
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Pest
...nts in food storage into consideration. pest control is only one aspect of the cost....
^^^^
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he security, and the logistics are other sides which requires large bunks of mone...
^^
Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ey input and can broach budget control. that is to say, even if the cost of pest-kil...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00833333333 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70849002396 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538888888889 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8157544644 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.6875 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217877138956 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706577227539 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543734869541 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148870913587 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0029123756053 0.0628817314937 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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