Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
Sports play a magnificent role to uplift the standard of health, wealth and relationship. Without sports, a life is anticipated to be monotonous. Presently, the prevalence of dangerous sports is gaining ground all over the world. Therefore, a massive number of people are enthusiastic to take part in such sports. Here, I would like to account for reasons for participation and suggestions to prevent from the injuries.
There are numerous causes behind this phenomenon. First and foremost, the dangerous sports have become a great source of earning name and fame along with money. For example, ...
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The verb "Emphasize" does not
The verb "Emphasize" does not have any prepositions.
"Further emphasising on my point of view"
I believe that "on" should be omitted.
Best Regards.
it is 'emphasising' not
it is 'emphasising' not 'emphasise' in this phrase.
'emphasising' can be considered as a noun, You can compare 'Further emphasising on my point of view' to 'good ideas from my mind'
I will further emphasise the point of view. //doesn't need 'on' here because emphasise is used as a verb.
I would like to account for reasons for participation
I would like to account for the reasons for participation
the incredible inventions of safety measures like as medical treatments and the special equipments
the incredible inventions of safety measures such as the medical treatments and special equipments
some countries are lack of adventurous sports players
some countries lack adventurous sports players
Definitions of lack
noun
the state of being without or not having enough of something.
the case was dismissed for lack of evidence
synonyms: absence, want, need, deficiency, dearth, insufficiency, shortage, shortfall, scarcity, paucity, unavailability, deficit
verb
be without or deficient in.
the novel lacks imagination
synonyms: be without, be in need of, need, be lacking, require, want, be short of, be deficient in, be bereft of, be low on, be pressed for, have insufficient, be strapped for
sports have become part and parcel of everyone's life. Sports authorities, administration and individual should share joint responsibility to control the darker side of the threatening sports.
sports have become the part and parcel of everyone's life. Sports authorities, administration and individual should share joint responsibilities to control the darker side of the threatening sports.
Sentence: Initially, offering special training classes to the players before being professional in such games could be a reliable panacea to take over injuries caused by the ventures games.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to ventures and games
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