In recent years, it is becoming increasingly common for teenagers to have excessive weight. It is often believed by some that the authorities are liable for the growth of obesity in young people. From my point of view, I completely disagree with this statement and hold the opinion that it is fully responsible for advertisement and parents.
To commence with, an increasing number of obese children may be associated with an advertisement which is made by food industries. They often create their commercials with children's favourite movie or animation characters and are aimed at teenagers as they are easy to manipulate. In most Asian countries, to illustrate, it is a common approach that advertising sweets, such as ice cream, candy and chips with the Pororo animation in order to attract young people. In this way, kids are fascinated by these commercials as they saw their respected persons and it leads them to eat that product very much.
On top of that, the reason why teenagers gain weight more can be an influence of parents. Children indeed tend to imitate their parents' actions, and also it is evident that adults often eat unhealthy foods, such as burgers and pizza, in the modern world. Due to this development, young people might be encouraged to eat fast foods excessively. Moreover, unfortunately, parents also do not care about what their kids are eating. They should pay attention to the eating habits of their children. For example, one recent study suggests that a majority of families ate fast food at a restaurant after they finished their academic tasks. To sum up, obesity of young persons is associated with their parents.
In conclusion, although many people believe that government take care of their future generation's health problems like obesity, as far as I am concerned it is the responsibility of commercials as well as parents for the weight problems of children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06349206349 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85178686696 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7170363241 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0985845909266 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353179963705 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380963971758 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769963022688 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493866638584 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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