On his visit to the village of Tertia, Dr. Field noticed that there was something peculiar in the village; which is that children in Tertia are reared by the whole village rather than their own biological parents. Based on the author's recent interviews, he disapproves Dr. Field's observation, since in the interview the children talked more about their biological parents rather than other adults. Using that knowledge Dr. Karp, the author, claims that Dr. Field's observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid, however, the validity of the claim is supported by lack of sufficient evidence, unjustified assumptions and aimless correlations. Therefore, making the author's conclusion flawed and debatable.
Dr. Karp states that based on his interview the children from Tertia talk more about their biological parents over other adults from the village, therefore, the observation-method is unapplicable to studying cultures. However, to validate this argument question from Dr. Karp's interview must be reviewed. If the author had asked questions only relating to the biological parents then it is obvious the children will talk more about them over the other adults; which would indicate that the interview did not hold proper questions to reach the given conclusion.
Additionally to the aforementioned argument, the author's argument takes unjustified assumptions that the village of Tertia is similar to other villages. If the population, culture, economy, and various other factors of Tertia are similar to majority of the villages then the author's claim that observation-method approach cannot be applied to studying culture may hold true. Presently however, there is no evidence that Tertia is similar to other villages, and that because observation-method approach might have been inappropriate for the study of Tertia it will be invalid for rest of the villages in the world. Without strong evidence of similarity between other villages and Tertia, the author's extreme claim that observation-approach is invalid for study of culture is debatable.
Despite having the aforementioned flaws, the author's argument might have some validity if the author is able to gather evidence from the interview-centered method he is currently holding. If the interview-centered method asks the appropriate questions to current parents of the village like "Who does your child spend the most time with?" then, based on the response the author's conclusion may gain some integrity. If the parents respond that majority of the time their children are with them then, it would disapprove Dr. Field's observation that children are reared by the village and show that observation-approach to studying culture might have some defects. However, if the response is opposite to what is previously stated, then, Dr. Field's observation would gain validity and disapprove Dr. Karp's conclusion.
The current conclusion presented by the author faces many challenges before it can be considered valid. These include, but are not limited to, insufficient evidence, unjustified assumptions and aimless correlations. Based on these flaws, it can be stated that the author has work to do and must present strong evidence, and details of the interview taken, interview that will be taken and statistical similarities between Teria and other villages to support their conclusion.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2803 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.464 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.132 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 175 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.553 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 680, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ess correlations. Therefore, making the authors conclusion flawed and debatable. Dr....
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...tions to reach the given conclusion. Additionally to the aforementioned argument, the aut...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...lly to the aforementioned argument, the authors argument takes unjustified assumptions ...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...te having the aforementioned flaws, the authors argument might have some validity if th...
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Line 7, column 382, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...?' then, based on the response the authors conclusion may gain some integrity. If ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2870.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 513.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59454191033 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20032619961 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41910331384 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 876.6 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2195250465 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.444444444 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.70786347227 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186943459461 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760487407621 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068766852027 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117522953898 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650353608224 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.3799401198 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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