Write a composition about the following graph representing birth and death rates in a developing country.
A glance at the given line diagram illustrated the proportion of both people who dead and pass away in a potential nation.
Overall, the lines were unstably fluctuating in the period. Additionally, although they have the same figures at the initial point, the distinguishes between death and birth rate separated them.
To be more specific, considering the percentage of people who have the first day in the life, in 1900, it accomplished 40 per thousand. Afterward, it started to gradually decrease from 1900 to 1930 and by 1930, it gained 35 per thousand. By stark contrast, In the next duration at that time to 1940, it increased by somewhere in the vicinity of 52 per thousand. From 1940 to 1970, it continuously declined and got some 32 per thousand by 1970 which was worse than the death rate.
On the one hand, it is indicated from the death line that from 1900 to 1910, the death rate was almost unchangeable with 40 per thousand. Consequently, the duration between 1910 and 1920 has shown a soar from 40 to nearly 60 per thousand. In spite of the increase, after that, it started to slump recognized approximately 23 at the bottom. After another rise, by 1950, it has inclined the second time from more or less 35 to merely 20 per thousand people at the end.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a dead'.
Suggestion: who is a dead
...lustrated the proportion of both people who dead and pass away in a potential nation. ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, in spite of, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1049.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 224.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68303571429 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74116958293 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 3.36585365854 327% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.8548933568 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.3636363636 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0705537970752 0.215688989381 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284715068552 0.103423049105 28% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479127726873 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0480949806003 0.15604864568 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393662097882 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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