Some people say that parents should take full reponsibility for their children’s obesity and unhealthy lifestyle while others people disagree
Discuss both views and give your own opinion
During the 3 months of stay at home epidemic due to the effects of Covid-19 Pandemic, numerous adolescents gained weight uncontrollably. It is considerably that children become obese and unconsciously lead an unhealthy existence becasue of their parents who have to make fully responsible for these things. Personally, I partly agree with this argument, which is true in a few aspects.
There might be some reasons why the seniors should take all the responsibility for children’s obesity and unhealthy lifestyle. One important reason is that children can imitate their parental lifestyle. Specifically, the way that adults eat or drink, as well as parental exercise routine, have a variety of influences on a young person’s life. For instance, if you smoke cigarettes regularly and also effortlessly do physical training exercises, consequences will be that your children also possible to unconsciously form those habits. Another reason is that the children' control is not strict and serious. The activities which lead the young generation consume a range of sweets like candy, pie,etc ; These general invisible will cause unwanted gain weight. Hence , parents should motivate their children to take more outside activities and to avoid eating snacks.
However , there is strong evidence that parents are not fully responsible for this because there are many factors which can affect the young generation’s lifestyle. One explanation is that schools and governments also have to take responsibility for this situation.Based on the school side, educational systems should concentrate more on improving physical health of children. For example , the best way is increasing a number of outdoor exercise classes as well as extracurricular activities. Based on the government, they should put some strict laws about banning children from playing video games overnight. A real example is that China government request Game companies allow playing game when people have ID card and blocking playing game after 10 pm
In conclusion, it is difficult to make a decision that parents ought to take fully responsible for the young generation’s weight gain and bad lifestyle. It is recommended that parents are mainly a factor affecting their children’s existence but not only.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51714285714 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0873741932 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588571428571 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1779022001 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.6875 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220939410328 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745575543234 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601407297723 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132799095865 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353500782187 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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