Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time Which of these situations do you think is better Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinio | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time Which of these situations do you think is better Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion B

Some people claimed that young adults ought to live with their parents for a longer time and the adults should be independence as soon as possible. In my opinion, I prefer for the adults should live with their family together for a one time. I will explain with the reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, parents is the most important blessing in a peron life. They used all of their golden time and money to raise us. The older they become, the more love they require from their children, and the health condition is not on par with today and tomorrow.On the other hand, the children might consider to become independence because they don't want to be obstacles for the parents. The parents, however, feel their children as treasure that they always want to keep even though their kids become grow enough.So, it is essential to take care of parents to fulfill their needs. I have an example that come into my mind is about my cousin family who is only chid and her father is already passed away . My cousin sister always searched for freedom and she loves to stay outside from her mother. She didn't notice about her mother conditions when my aunty was sick. By the time she knew this matter, it was too late and she regret what she has done.
Secondly, the most precious moment is seeing the parents when we arrived home.Although, the children become adults, they still need to discuss some stuff to het the best decision. Nevertheless, the parents already had experience with their own knowledge, they can really give light for the children. By living together with parents, the adults can posses happiness and love.
To sum up,according to the reason that I mentioned above, I am sure that children should live with their family can get benefit for them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, still, as to, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70739549839 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35974067821 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572347266881 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9207375567 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32859754797 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114494137717 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10721149247 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218788967267 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126766495537 0.0645574589148 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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