Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others
think access to much information creates problems.
There is no cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that the internet provides a great deal of information for everyone. It arouses much controversy among members of particular with different perspective , due to their distinctive experiences about whether using the Internet is worthwhile in the community or not. It is now completely explicit that the diversity of views has converged to two. I am so eager to assert a few words in this issue. After some investigations, among countless factors, which influence this choice, there are conspicuous testimonies. In order to substantiate my vantage points, I would like to address some of the key evidence: It is an appropriate amusement in life; and also, It has a vital role for students in the university.
In the first place, the most noticeable merit of the notion would be a great entertainment such as chatting, communication with our friends in around the world, sharing new knowledge, even shopping. Another subtle explanation for my viewpoint we can reserve a room or ticket, sell a certain product. What’s more, we can interact with others in each of palace. A concrete example for this matter; one of my friends in my country has connected with most of the student in the United state; they have comfortable relationship with many websites. Needless to say, under this circumstance, communication become easier than decade ago no reservation.
Along the same line, another privilege of the aforementioned idea; it is an indispensable criterion for searching in the college. The main reason for my propensity for this issue we can to find the fast information you just need put the key word and the result will show on screen and you can select the information that is related to the project. Besides it has a tremendous of data about various topics as well. One of the striking examples; last year I use the Internet for my thesis in class. I utilized the different web such as Google and Bings for my investigation. It seems to confirm the idea that invention the Internet is a pivotal tool in the society without hesitation.
In spite of the above mentioned, to be frank, all these demonstrate the undeniable fact that a majority of individuals are convinced some of the student become addict to the net. They do not use from our mind for solving problems, indeed, they become lazy and inactive. the Internet damages to the body and mind. There are numerous instances that closely fit the notion. Considering all the detail many scholars has proven this matter , which net would be harmful and useless for children definitely.
To put the issue into perspective, by taking into account these entire aspects, we can safely draw the conclusion that the Internet has a remarkable impact in life due to having a plethora information and is a proper hobby for someone. Indeed, by careful scrutinizing, hence, there are benefits and drawbacks for everything created on the earth. The criteria could not be easily determined, and opinions are highly personal. Consequently, as a final statement, I would like to point out that the Internet is a precious wealth today. However, I assume points; I have discussed in the above analysis are most relevant.
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1. The introduction and conclusion could be shorter and more straight forward.
2. Remove all grammatical errors.
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I am so eager to assert a few words in this issue
I would like to address some of the key evidence
I would like to point out that
However, I assume points; I have discussed in the above analysis are most relevant.
Indeed, many thanks for your
Indeed, many thanks for your great suggestion.
Pardon me,I have a question that get tips from you about composition.
I have a large problem in writing, When I write an essay, I have a little sentence in my mind about that topic.
I got sentences of the other compositions, and memorize them.
This method to improve the essay is wrong?
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It is OK to read essays by
It is OK to read essays by other users and memorize something you think may be good for you, but slowly you should have your own ideas, and styles.
There is no cast a shadow of doubt
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communication become easier
communication becomes easier
that invention the Internet is a pivotal tool in the society without hesitation.
that the invention of Internet is a pivotal tool in the society without hesitation.
many scholars has proven this matter
many scholars have proven this matter
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 539 350
No. of Characters: 2595 1500
No. of Different Words: 297 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.818 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.814 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.826 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.731 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.338 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.346 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.249 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.448 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5