Some people feel that entertainer (E.g : film stars, pop musicians or sport stars ) are paid too much money
Do you agree and disagree ? Which other types of job should be highly paid.
It is clear said that people who work in the entertainment industry are paid a lot, so there is a debatable when we talk about the proportional of this wage comparing with the other professional. In this essay, I will not only describe the reason why entertainer should be receive more money but also show about the other professions need to have an income more than them.
To begin with, there are many reason why entertainer should be received the huge number of money. First, the reputation of them is came from their both effor on every major and a huge number of fans, so it will not be the unappropriate things if they don’t gain a lot of money rely on these reasons. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo is one of the most wealthiest althletes in the world because of he not only tries hard to improve himself but also has a wide range of reputation. Moreover, these professions have a short life span, which can occur many problem for some entertainer because of having a low level of income. For instance, there are many Vietnamese football player often have a problem in pay a living after retire from any Football club..
On the other hands, there is some other jobs which may be paid more money than film, music and sports, in my opinion. People who is working as government official should receive the high income so that they can have a good life after being resigned and they never get involved in bribe because of having not enough money. Beside, a lucrative income will also attract more people to this profession which is otherwise considered unattractive by many individuals. Moreover, any individuals working in social worker are compensated poorly with no added perks. Because of its, one will be making it a popular career path for youngsters, more and more people will happily put an effort to the whole society.
Therefore, the need of any hour is to identify professions other than entertainment that need to be rewarded financially. Every country, must have a list of professions that no matter what get paid well thereby creating an equilibrum in the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77134986226 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63640537574 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526170798898 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.8616957838 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.714285714 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309274377991 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113665577462 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179068244511 0.0667982634062 268% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230581737978 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.24795788706 0.056905535591 436% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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