As computers and technology develop, they can be used to teach children and teachers won't be necessory soon. Do you agree or disagree?

Sentence: Furthermore, it help them to save their time and provide convenience.
Description: The fragment it help them is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace help with verb, past tense

Sentence: However, I feel, the presence of a teacher is essential for students because the human contact influence them in several ways, positively.
Description: The fragment contact influence them is rare
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Sentence: Though expert system has made computers more intellegent, they are not yet become a substitute for teachers in the learning process.
Error: intellegent Suggestion: intelligent

Sentence: In my opinion, the disappreance of teachers from the classroom is not possible in the near future.
Error: disappreance Suggestion: disappearance

Sentence: To begin with, some people believe that, the role of teachers started to fade because, computers have been helping students to progress in their studies quicker than when compered with an original classroom.
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Sentence: Some students especially brillent students use this oppertunity to progress in their acquisiton of knowledge at their own pace instead of learning from the teacher.
Error: acquisiton Suggestion: acquisition
Error: oppertunity Suggestion: opportunity

Sentence: Firstly, students realize that they are not dealing with a meachine but with a human being, who deserves respect and attention.
Error: meachine Suggestion: machine

Sentence: They know the strength and weakness of each student and teach them accordingly, including special attention to poor academic pupils, by repeating some explanations, giving extra exercies or even suggesting for a private tutor.
Error: exercies Suggestion: exercise

Sentence: For instance, pupiles try to immitate walking style, mannarisams, dress code and so forth.
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Sentence: A further point is that teachers impart knowlede along with moral values.
Error: knowlede Suggestion: knowledge

Sentence: Students also learn the importance of studing in group and respect their colleages, which helps them to boost their social skills.
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Sentence: In conclution, the role of a good teacher in learning process is pivotal.
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Sentence: I feel, it will continue in the future because, no matter how sofosticated the computer is, it can't replace human interactions and its positive impacts totally.
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flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2 Double check spellings after writing
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 409 350
No. of Characters: 2109 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.497 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.156 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.743 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.591 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Thankyou Sir..

I too realize the typing mistakes are too much..

I will try to correct it...

Thanks once again...

Tessy James