In the memorandum, the president of Humana University asserts that Humana University should introduce online courses, similar to Omni University, so as to increase their admission numbers and solve the problem of budget deficits. The president's contention might be true, but it rests on three unstated assumptions, which if not clarrified will dramatically reduce the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all, the president assumes that Humana University and Onmi University are comparable to one another. It might be the case that the quality of courses offered by Omni University are excellent, which in turn has lead to the increased number of admissions. The president assumes that Humana University can also offer online courses which equally good in quality. Even if Humana University is able to match the course quality, it might be possible that Omni University offers some courses based on specialised domains, which is attracting the crowd of students and that Humana University lacks the faculty to introduce similar courses. Thus, if either of these circumstance is true, then the president's claim does not hold water.
Second of all, the president assumes that introduction of online courses will result in reduced expenses. It might be possible that the expenses for introducing online courses exceeds the expenses saved on dormitory and classroom space and thus requires more funds than the existing medium of classes. It might also be possible that in addition to these expenses, Humana University needs to invest a large sum of money in advertisement of the new online courses. If such cases are true, then Humana University will not be able to solve its budget deficit problems and the president's arguement is thus unwarranted.
Last of all, the president assumes that the current trends at Omni University over the last one year will also continue in the future. It might be possible that due to the current pandemic scenario the popularity of online courses has increased, but in the near future as things get back to normal, students will flock towards offline medium of classes. It might also be possible that the high admission trends and reduced expenses at Omni University are observed because of less options of online courses available to the students. Once more Universities adopt online classes, the anomalous trends at Omni University will be back to the old ones. Thus, if the model of online courses fails in the recent future, then the mentioned benefits from the model cannot be availed by Humana University. In this case, the president's contention is invalid.
Thus, it might be true that the introduction of online courses at Humana University will solve the existing problems. But, as it stands now, the president's claim is based on three unwarranted assumptions. In order to increase the persuasiveness of the argument, the president must give clarrifications on those three fronts.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 471 350
No. of Characters: 2411 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.659 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.119 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.765 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.399 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ne courses, similar to Omni University, so as to increase their admission numbers and so...
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Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'presidents'' or 'president's'?
Suggestion: presidents'; president's
...lve the problem of budget deficits. The presidents contention might be true, but it rests ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ts on three unstated assumptions, which if not clarrified will dramatically reduce...
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Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...turn has lead to the increased number of admissions. The president assumes that H...
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Line 7, column 476, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun options is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...Omni University are observed because of less options of online courses available to ...
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Line 7, column 815, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'presidents'' or 'president's'?
Suggestion: presidents'; president's
...by Humana University. In this case, the presidents contention is invalid. Thus, it migh...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, thus, as to, in addition, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23779193206 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81353761082 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430997876858 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3462271802 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.35 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.55 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283621760559 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105716729147 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751460104599 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183519466549 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662304113093 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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