The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the writing, the president and the director of Grove college are discussing whether abolishing only-female tradition would be beneficial to the university. The main reason why the president support it is the expected number of application, while the director emphasizes on the survey results saying students and alumnae want to keep their tradition. Both opinions and claims are typical when women's universities have same arguements from time to time, however, there are some questions need to be answered to evaluate which side is the more reasonable opinion.
First of all, for the president's statement, he needs to answer the question whether abolisment of the old policy was the only significatn factor that increased applicats number. In many cases, private foundations promise women's universities that they would invest them if they change their school policy to adopt male students as well. In such case, abolishing female-only policy will not directly augment the number of applicants. Also, even if there are more applicants, it is still questionable whether the difference is statistically significant since it is not surprising to have more applicants if there is doubled number of students who can apply for the university. If the president can say 'yes' for both of the questions, his opinion would sound much more powerful and compelling.
And for the director's argument mentioning about freshmen and alumnae also needs more evidence to support his opinion. He clamied that the freshmen surveys showed the primary reason they selected Grove was becasue it is female-only university. However, is does not sound meaningful for this argument. For how long the surveys were conducted? Who conducted the surevey? What were the other opitions for the question? We can not decide whether the survey result is reliable unless the director answers to these questions. Next, he also needs to answer a few more questions about the alumnae's opinion. Since the most of students leave their community once they graduate, the 'alumnae' might be the ones who share university's traditional value. And this means he needs to answer whether the number of alumnae who disagree with chaning school policy is significant, or they are just a few, extreme minority. If he can show more proves that the evidence is strong enough to say 'yes' to all these questions, he might gain more support from students and alumnae.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1986 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.119 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.671 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.405 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.432 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'presidents'' or 'president's'?
Suggestion: presidents'; president's
...nable opinion. First of all, for the presidents statement, he needs to answer the quest...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...residents statement, he needs to answer the question whether abolisment of the old policy was the on...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
...powerful and compelling. And for the directors argument mentioning about freshmen and ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 609, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...s about the alumnaes opinion. Since the most of students leave their community once they graduat...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, still, well, while, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22164948454 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74383723803 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515463917526 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0565680776 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.631578947 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0932378171976 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0312674252339 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496044384618 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732245345917 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257527408927 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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