The participation of parents during childhood plays a crucial role in the form of one's characteristics. Some people might consider outdoor activities or entertainment are the best options, others hold the opinion that doing schoolwork is better. From my perspective, I believe that both of them are equally important and I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, games or sports help form an individual's characteristics and capabilities to communicate with others. In the early 2020, Oxford university published a investigation association between participate collective activities and one's social abilities. The research demonstrated that people who spend times in group game and sports are more willing to take risks and maintain positive when it comes to failure. To illustrate, famous athlete Kobe Bryant is an compelling example. As a professional basketball player, losing games is an common thing but the attitude after ganes reflect one's greatess. Kobe Bryant turn failure into motivation and respond with numerable of hard working and it leads to his successful career.
On the other hand, learing with parents increase to joymnent of obsorbing knowledge. Parenting requires coutless patient and in numerous of energy during the pocess, not to mention money that have to put in. However, with parent's participation, childern can connect and relate the hardwaorking that have been spend. For instance, a friend of my was born with significnat family background but his parents are drawning in works. Lack of concern and company, he usually perform poorly on in the academy. After staring his own family, he choose a different way to treat his offspring and found out whay the problem was in his childhood.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that both activities are equally important to a person. With parents acompany, both game and schoolwork can be a useful tools to education offspring.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ood plays a crucial role in the form of ones characteristics. Some people might cons...
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Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...early 2020, Oxford university published a investigation association between parti...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...lustrate, famous athlete Kobe Bryant is an compelling example. As a professional b...
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Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...onal basketball player, losing games is an common thing but the attitude after gan...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
... relate the hardwaorking that have been spend. For instance, a friend of my was born ...
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Line 5, column 469, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'performs'.
Suggestion: performs
...Lack of concern and company, he usually perform poorly on in the academy. After staring...
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Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...ademy. After staring his own family, he choose a different way to treat his offspring ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34193548387 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01110673802 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632258064516 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.5327938746 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.4117647059 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208665783014 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541495294795 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522599567495 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105058581305 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291078126788 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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