it is true that the rapid development of large cities is accompanied by some problems, which obviously lead to obstacles for people,especially for youngsters living in urban areas.This essay will first suggest several problems related to this trend and then argue that solutions can be taken to mitigate those potential issues.
There are a number of issues arising due to the immigration of young people from rural areas to urban ones.The most serious problem is the difficulty young inhabitants face to get employed in the competitive job market of a growing city.For example,the young often flock to fast-growing cities such as HaNoi or HCM city for better employment opportunities,which means that a great number of unskilled young applicants remain unemployed.As a result,the high cost of living in big cities has placed a heavy financial burden on young citizens whose salaries are not adequate to cover all of their living expenses including food and services, accommodation and this might make them experience higher risk of mental health problems such as stress,depression or even anxiety disorder.
However, there are several actions that could be taken to tackle the problem. One solution to deal with the high unemployment rate would be for governments to provide education and vocational training for young people so that people are well-equipped with knowledge and skills to get a decent job and earn a stable income. Another approach is to raise awareness of a work-life balanced routine among young inhabitants, they will be more willing to engage in other entertaining activities besides working and focus more on a balanced lifestyle, which is an ideal way to relieve stress and pressure. Thirdly, parents should also pay more attention to their offsprings in order to hinder them from suffering from mental illness.
In conclusion,although there are some inevitable problems pertaining to unemployment and mental illnesses due to the overcrowding in central cities.However,politicians and young residents themselves should all join hands to alleviate those problems mentioned above.
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- Students today can easily access information online so libraries are no longer necessary Do you agree or disagree 95
- The diagram shows the life cycle of the honey bee 78
- When choosing a job the salary is the most important consideration To what extent do you agree or disagree 92
- Many young people change their jobs and careers What are the reasons for this Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 78
- In some countries people spend long hours at work Why does this happen and it is positive or negative development 56
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47239263804 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34550425115 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625766871166 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 20.2975951904 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 211.760935674 49.4020404114 429% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 254.857142857 106.682146367 239% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.5714285714 20.7667163134 224% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.1428571429 7.06120827912 271% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313784468091 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122088416076 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077640474517 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170953237215 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574626424308 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.6 13.0946893788 211% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 16.33 50.2224549098 33% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 11.3001002004 198% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.33 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.05 8.58950901804 129% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.1190380762 202% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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