New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time.
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
New engineering science have changed the mode youngsters spend their leisure time. This essay will examine both sides of the argument before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
Admittedly, there are some arguments in favor of new technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. First, technologies play a important role in favor of the way children in the learning, entertaining process, relationship with their friends and how to behave in society. This study supports presumably tends not only to increase the overall learning development but also to children create many new ideas. Information source, knowledge from technologies web on the Internet,… always create excitement for young people. Second, children focus and research about new technologies in their free time would probably result in a greater supply of highly qualified workers which benefits society in the long run. In fact, it is acknowledged that skilled and knowledgeable human about technologies is imperative to foster economic growth and technological developments in any nations.
Nevertheless, the resultant problems would be far more significant than the minor benefits once children use their free time new technologies. First, children concentrate on technologies and Internet is would likely correspond with a relationship with their family. Almost parents have less time with their children, because they just working, and after a long day parents will go back home and they will be have less time to do housework, chat or play with children. So, children only feel happy when playing game and log into unhealthy sites. Gradually, they will feel these habits are indispensable. Children become passive and depressed. Second, it will effect health because when using technology too much can lead to unhealthy habits, affecting but not only the physical but also the mental of the child. Example, children using smartphones for hours everyday. You make children sedentary, children will don’t like move more, this can lead to obesity and other health problems. It, instead, would be a more the way spend free time option if children can control usage technologies.
I was discussed about disadvantages and advantages of children using technologies in their free time. From my perspective, this using technologies too much has more positive than negative on both the personal and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44474393531 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91517876492 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56064690027 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1767755727 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 7.06120827912 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424090041474 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130988946121 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127420066528 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254632310386 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534368235768 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.