In some countries people spend long hours at work Why does this happen and it is positive or negative development

Occupation is placed a significant emphasis in the society. In some parts of the world, extending the working hours is becoming more prevalent. There are several reasons behind this trend.From my perspective, although it brings a handful of merits, I believe that its negative effects are proved to outweigh and I will show them in my essay. There are two main reasons which lead to the extension of working hours among people. The first reason is that people want to earn more money. It is undeniable that money plays an integral role these days , especially when we are living in a greedy little world. The much higher cost of living puts a financial burden on employees, especially the breadwinners to make ends meet. Not only their basic needs for food, clothing but also the desire to eat well, wear luxurious-branded clothes. Henceforth ,people have to work extra hours in order to improve living standards. Secondly,some people want to improve job prospects or to get promotion. In a cut-throat labor market like today where people must compete with others to land a decent job and climb on career ladder even though they can suffer from mass workload which is difficult meet the deadline and be unable to finished if people do not extend their working hours.Despite the benefits that this trend may bring to people, I believe it is negative due to two major reasons.Working extended hours triggers a lot of detrimental health effects.People who work long shifts can not have enough time to rest . For that reason they are easily prone to physical diseases relating to the back, neck, eyes and even heart and mental problems such as stress, depression. Inadequate health results in more sick days, poor work performance, and low productivity. Besides people can not get a work-life balance. The employees are always swamped with work which prevent them from taking frequent family trips or even just eating meals together. As a result, the family relationship is deteriorated step -by-step.
In conclusion, extending working hours is motivated by a variety of factors, including financial constraints and improved job prospects. This trend should be significantly reduced because long working hours are harmful to workers' health and families

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10869565217 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82358842087 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627717391304 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.527984737 49.4020404114 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 104.444444444 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215309179813 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625775945303 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594675501209 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178922121465 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140621895786 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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