The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with
children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children
spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in
the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian
village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying
cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate
students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding
of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the article it is stated that, observations concluded by Dr. Karp which was that, "in the island of Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents" are completly invalid, he has also provided a few evidence points in the article to support his statement. However, before we accept hos statements can be evaluated , three questions must be answered.
First of all, Can we conclude that children are reared by only the parents just by asking the children who mostly won't remember what their childhood was like? The author has assumed that the children are talking to their biological parents disproves what Dr. Field had stated, it is possible that Dr. Karp's and Dr. Fields conclusions both together contribute to the research as the people in the island of Tertia were belonging from the same blood line which could be why the people of those island reared the children along with the biological parents
Secondly, Can the author use the knowledge of one culture to many different cultures such as the culture of the Tertia Island? The author assumes that people's culture of other islands is similar to the culture of Tertia Island. It is highly possible that the people of Tertia Island bond along easily and treat people as their families hence rear the childeren together as a family also the children intereact with their blood parents more because of where they usually eat and sleep.
Thirdly, Can the author publish an article and state someone wrong without having concreate evidence? The author himself has stated in the artile that they are yet to get specific evidence to make his evaluations more concreate. The research that the author has performed seems to be incomplete because of which it can create assumptions amoung people about an Island and it could also alter the evaluations of other researchers who were working on the same research.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now is considered flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted asssumptions. If the author is able to answer the above 3 questions and offer more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendations to publish an article or even an paper regarding it.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1841 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.858 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.518 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.961 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.677 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e accept hos statements can be evaluated , three questions must be answered. Fi...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[2]
Message: The verb belong is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'belonged'
Suggestion: belonged
...h as the people in the island of Tertia were belonging from the same blood line which could be...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...h as the people in the island of Tertia were belonging from the same blood line which could be...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this island' or 'those islands'?
Suggestion: this island; those islands
...d line which could be why the people of those island reared the children along with the biol...
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...hor use the knowledge of one culture to many different cultures such as the culture of the Ter...
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Line 9, column 203, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...ove 3 questions and offer more evidence then it will be possible to fully evaluate t...
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Line 9, column 322, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...endations to publish an article or even an paper regarding it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98941798942 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60269341082 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513227513228 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.233822807 57.8364921388 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.454545455 119.503703932 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3636363636 23.324526521 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7272727273 5.70786347227 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309565325656 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107567798075 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101374581054 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166964018724 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795090994601 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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