There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Music has developed so much since the history of the first kind of music recognized by the society. In this century, there are more than hundreds types of music in the world, ranging from traditional to contemporary music. As we come from different cultures and we live different life styles, each of us will have different preferences of music. However, I believe that everyone of us listens to music regardless the different type of music we fancy.
The fact that music is unseparable from humans's routine shows how important it is to the society. I believe this is because music has a magic of...
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Sentence: If or not it is traditional is not so important as long as the individual enjoys what he/she is listening to.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a conjunction, coordinating
Suggestion: Refer to If and or
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Category: Very Good Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1598 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
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No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.824 21.0
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
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