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MAURITIAN TEENAGERS IN THEIR MAIN DIET

The line graph gives data about usage of pizza, hamburgers and fried chicken by Mauritian teenagers over the period 30 years.
It’s noticeable that there was a dramatic roar in the amount of hamburgers eaten by teens in Mountain between 1985 and 2015. In contrast, the consumption of pizza fell continuously during the given stage.
In 1985, teens in Multan were most favored in Pizza in their main diet, at 60 times per year and got six times as much as the hamburgers. Nevertheless, this number dropped enormously to the end of the stage and turned to be the least popular fast food in 2015, ended at 10 times per year.
Switching to two others fast foods, hamburgers and fried chicken. In 1985, the amount of hamburgers consumed by Mauritian’s teens saw 50 times less than that of pizza. After climbing up and overtook pizza in 2015, this figure was the highest and became the most favorite fast food in Mauritian teenagers’s meal. Whereas, the consumption of fried chicken witnessed a significant growth over the period shown. This number surpass the amount of hamburgers eaten in 2005 before increasing minimally is the next 10 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 312, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ast food in Mauritian teenagers’s meal. Whereas, the consumption of fried chicken witne...
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Line 4, column 420, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'surpasses'.
Suggestion: surpasses
...owth over the period shown. This number surpass the amount of hamburgers eaten in 2005 ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nevertheless, whereas, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63045432213 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8143618235 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.23603664747 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155757171132 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502040980385 0.103423049105 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661215836712 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819325712558 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499191274805 0.0819641961636 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nevertheless, whereas, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments